Comments | jazzfic: Fic: Boy Soldier (Firefly: Zoe, G)

jazzfic

Fic: Boy Soldier (Firefly: Zoe, G)

May 07, 2008 20:19

Boy Soldier, G, 379 words
For invisibleshrew; Firefly, Zoe--choices.
She'd watched too many die like this.

( You believe me, don't you, Sir? I had no choice. )

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Comments 6

biases May 7 2008, 11:54:31 UTC

WAH SO SAD! :'(

Great writing as always, I love the subtleties of your delicate style. And I was there, watching Zoe, hearing the gunshots. Just lovely.

jazzfic May 9 2008, 08:34:39 UTC

Thank you. I was trying to get a sense of place (in very few words!) and how Zoe would have focused on the situation--so I'm glad it worked for you :)

jesterlady May 7 2008, 19:07:28 UTC

That's awesome. Such a real description of life before Serenity.

jazzfic May 9 2008, 08:35:19 UTC

Cheers, thanks so much :)

invisibleshrew May 8 2008, 01:35:46 UTC

Oh! Fabulous! All resigned and tired and matter-of-fact, and then Mal turns up, which throws a whole other light on hoping she'd forgiven him his exuberance and foolish choices, since he's still all bright-eyed and bushy-tailed himself.

I really like the idea that she doesn't spend any time at all worrying about the truth of what she says, only the comfort of it, and that she allows herself only a flash of feeling (but that she does allow it).

jazzfic May 9 2008, 08:42:18 UTC

Oh, I'm so glad it worked for you. It was hard to get a character across in a small piece like this, especially when it's not all fun and games (death and isolation being as far from that as you can get, I suppose). But Zoe's strength is a very natural thing to portray.

Thank you!