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therumjournals January 8 2010, 03:42:50 UTC
This was great! I loved Kirk's inner monologue when Spock first comes in, and th whole second part is so full of emotion and intensity and it's really well done.

"If he had a type, it was the incredibly smart and good-looking, complete with a small dash of the unknown; the sense of mystery waiting to be unraveled." - conveniently describes basically everyone on the senior staff ;-)

Love this line, too - " How could the universe think that Vulcans couldn’t feel? They felt so beautifully, at least this one did." - ahhh, love for Kirk/Spock :-D

but i do have to add one more thing to the end of your fic... "and then they made out." okay, all done :-D

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jaylee_g January 8 2010, 17:20:26 UTC
LOL! Love the ending you added. ;-)

Thanks so much for the sweet, heartwarming feedback. I'm so thrilled that you enjoyed the story.

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larawander5 January 8 2010, 04:14:44 UTC
This fic was lovely!

Brain, you spoke out of turn...Once again his brain was controlling his responses without his express permission. How did Spock always do this to him?...Thank you, brain, for finally coming up with an involuntary response of which I approve.

I especially love the conversations Kirk had with his brain XD

Thank you so much for sharing!

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jaylee_g January 8 2010, 17:22:36 UTC
A fellow team Sporker! Hello, my dear.

Thank you for the awesome feedback. I'm so tickled that you enjoyed the story.

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tinocka January 8 2010, 06:07:17 UTC
This was so beautiful and so intense :) I loved every single bit of it.

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jaylee_g January 8 2010, 17:23:35 UTC
Thank you for the wonderful, heartwarming praise. I'm so thrilled that you enjoyed the story. :-)

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chironstar January 8 2010, 06:59:22 UTC
Absolutely beautiful - one of the best characterizations of Jim, Spock, and Bones I've seen. You've got their dynamic and their voices down perfectly (especially nu!Kirk), and you turned me to mush with Spock's speech at the end. Well done and thank you for sharing this with us! ♥♥♥

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jaylee_g January 8 2010, 17:27:16 UTC
Wow, I don't think a greater praise can be had. You have not only made my morning, you made my whole week! Seriously, one happy, smiling, thrilled writer sitting right here, grinning from ear to ear. Thank you for such heartwarming feedback!

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eareniel January 8 2010, 10:14:25 UTC
Wonderful! I´m always pleased to see you post a new fic, as they are all so greatly written. This one was really intense with great characterization, especially Jim´s personality you captured splendidly. Thanks for great read! :)

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jaylee_g January 8 2010, 17:35:10 UTC
I´m always pleased to see you post a new fic, as they are all so greatly written.

Wow. You have me speechless in both excitement and happiness. I almost don't know what to say to such heartwarming, sweet and entirely inspiring praise. Feedback like this that makes posting a new story a wonderful experience. You've touched my heart. :-)

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