New Fic!!

[jatam]

OK, I just had this idea and couldn't help but write about it. I am probably WAY off base with this, but there yo go. If anyone has any comments, concerns or thoughts, I appreciate them all. Anyways, here goes! Oh, by the way, it has NOTHING to do with the fic I was talking about before, I'm just random like that!

Title: A World Away
Fandom: Heroes

Comments

[beyondallelse]

It's very, very well written. I have only one suggestion:

"... he had long lost the rose colored glasses he had long ago worn with pride."

The use of the word "long" twice in the sentence is extraneous. If you get rid on either usage, it would have perfect parralellism.

Other than that, it was very good.

[jatam]

Thanks for that! Sometimes you just need a fresh pair of eyes to pick up on these things.

Glad you liked it!

[lostandalone22]

Great job. You did a really good job on seeing Peter's perspective on things.

[jatam]

Thank you! I was a little worried about my Peter voice, so thanks!

[meli_64]

Great fic! :D Shades of grey. Really awesome perspective.

[jatam]

Thank you! That means sooo much coming from you!