Week 6 // Promises, Promises

[vexatively]

I look at you and press the dampened cloth to my bleeding forehead. You chide me gently; I banish your love-filled words to a place of no return (but, I want it to return, so much…).

“Why weren’t you here, Hana-san?” I demand instead, hiding the broken trust behind words of ice. I expect you to flinch, but instead, your smile melted my anger.

Comments

[miyukiwolfire]

That's odd, the LJ cut isn't working . . . .

[vexatively]

That is why, ladies and gentlemen, you shouldn't post while stressed about homework! Thank you, thank you very much! *curtseys*

Does that mean you wouldn't have commented if the LJ cut was working? *winks* :P

[miyukiwolfire]

Of course I would have commented. I just didn't want you to be yelled at.

[furousha]

wow. this is so good. i have no words to describe it. :)

[vexatively]

*blush* Thank you! <3 I guess I shouldn't really let my angst!muse get rampant on Mother's Day, huh? -_-*

[salomesensei]

I love the way you experiment with language and point of view.
I confess I did have to ask who the second character was, but now that I know it's a nurse, I can comment responsibly about how much I enjoy the tone and pov.

[vexatively]

It IS confuzzling... ^~^ I should really stop experimenting one of these days... o.O LOL... *sweatdrops*

*points* Buuyo rocks!

[salomesensei]

Do not stop experimenting. You encourage others to take risks and to grow. Truly.

[landofthekwt]

Very innovative use of ever changing first person sets the tone for
this piece. Well done.

[vexatively]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked!