the places you'll go
just a warning, it's 17 pages double spaced on word. it's basically a semester project. don't worry about understanding the cabins and mayweather, father sheppard and the rock formation. those are just things for the class specifically. thankssss
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You know I'm not one for editing, only a few things I would have changed but it wasn't grammatical so there's no need for you to change them. Those things are your style, your choice for metaphors. Why would I change that? (Besides, it's ridiculous to think that KATIE would ever correct MELISSA's grammar. That just is silly.)
I REALLY liked how you mentioned that the colors of human art can never capture the beauty that is nature.
Basically, it was beautiful. What were the rock formations and mayweather stuff you mentioned in the beginning? Did you have to write a story with those elements in it? Are you going to get to hear everyone else's?
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