Foundations

[ishonn]

Sometime in June I heard that I give my poems very good titles. The next day I wrote the following piece. It took me a few hours to find any title at all.

I am not sure in how much R/S was on my mind when I was writing this poem. Certainly I wasn't free from their presence.

FOUNDATIONS

There are no truths we could share,
so we let the night conceal the

Comments

[paulamcg]

I’m too slow at composing my comments, and there’s a lot left I want to say about the pieces I’ve reviewed and about (your) writing in general. Perhaps, indeed, you’ll find readers for your poems more easily in communities for so-called original (non-fanfiction) writing, but I still think some fans of R/S, too, could enjoy them. If you should later meet more critical readers who challenge you by questioning your choices and suggesting that you’d better have written something differently, it might comfort you to know that the poems worked well for me.

I do like your titles. The short poems must have really short titles, and I think it suits well to leave articles out. This also makes some titles more ambiguous, as e.g. dress could be a verb as well.

I wonder if my memory fails me, but I think you didn’t like the title His Face Shines in the Gloom of My Parents’ House (and I asked if you’d like to read my lj entry The Naming of Stories). Well, I wouldn’t choose such a title for a five-line poem! I had doubts about my choice, but it

[ishonn]

Please, don't worry about your pace at commenting. Take as much time as you wish, and I really am in no place to complain. Besides, it happens that I need good few hours to think your remarks through and find answers that were hidden deep behind my consciousness.

It is astounding how many things get written by themselves, in how far my poems have autonomy. How many things I could never write differently, because they are what they are, full stop. I will be happy to hear most critical remarks, and I shall always have yours in mind. They give me a lot of comfort and joy.

I am so glad that my titles work for you! Sometimes I use the title as the key to the poem. I am not particularly happy about it, as I tend to believe that the poem should rather explain everything by itself. However, in many cases such additional explanation would ruin the picture by its literality. Therefore I choose to move the explanation to the title, as in Fear. Don't you think that without this title the poem would be much less understandable