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ireneadler

Kissing Luna Lovegood

May 08, 2007 21:34

Title: Kissing Luna Lovegood
Pairing: Gabrielle/Luna
Rating: PG
Word Count: approx. 3400
Disclaimer: So not mine
Summary: Gabrielle comes of age and discovers life and love in Paris
Notes: Written for sweetcaroleanne at hpslashnotsmut

( Eclectic but beautiful, just like Luna )

fanfic

Comments 16

acoustics1220 May 8 2007, 13:19:51 UTC

hee!

Fluff is so sweet, almost gives me a toothache!

I liked this, Gabrielle was SO obviously going to go to Luna, and I liked how it just slowly grew and how there were those *almost* kisses, and then finally - IT HAPPENED. LOL.

And I liked the backstory with Maman and Fleur, and all that. Very cool. Well done, hon! <-- that rhymed *is dork*

whatyouthinkiam May 9 2007, 06:21:56 UTC

Seconded.

ireneadler May 23 2007, 09:13:59 UTC

Thank you!

ireneadler May 23 2007, 09:13:31 UTC

Goodness, I'm behind with comments. Whoops.

*hands floss* Perhaps I should warn for tooth decay? Hee. Fluff is fun sometimes. I tried to add a bit of angst, but Gabrielle was having none of that. These Veela girls have cores of steel.

And thank you for your lovely comments. I'm glad you liked it. ♥

veijarikissa May 8 2007, 13:20:39 UTC

This is so beatiful! I just adore this. ^^

ireneadler May 23 2007, 09:14:40 UTC

Thank you! I had a lot of fun writing this, so I'm glad you enjoyed.

(Also, I adore your icon.)

Kissing Luna Lovegood antyureff May 8 2007, 14:07:12 UTC

A sensuous, delightful read. It's both forlorn and uplifting; a combination that never fails to capture the depths of life itself.

The only line I found a bit jarring was this one: That put an end to that nonsense.

For some reason, it seemed to ruin the flow of the paragraph.

I really enjoyed the mocking stability of your words, the way you laced them together, so that the finished weave is a tale of love's tender triumph.

Re: Kissing Luna Lovegood ireneadler May 23 2007, 09:16:55 UTC

What a delightful review! (And apologies for the comment being late, I've been out of the country.) Thank you for all your comments. I'll think about that one line, and see what I can do to make it flow better. My stories tend to be perpetual WIPs--I'm always going back and tweaking a word here and there. Ha.

Re: Kissing Luna Lovegood antyureff May 23 2007, 13:23:04 UTC

My stories tend to be perpetual WIPs--I'm always going back and tweaking a word here and there.

Ah, the sign of a good writer!

Hope your trip was enjoyable! Where'd you go? Fodder for more stories?

Re: Kissing Luna Lovegood ireneadler May 23 2007, 13:47:59 UTC

Ah, the sign of a good writer!

And there I was thinking it was the sign of a nit-picker... *g*

The trip was lovely. I went to Baltimore area for my sister's wedding. Very short trip, but it was grand to see all the family. (I live abroad, so I don't get home much. Hadn't seen one brother for over two years, up until last Thursday!) Not sure about story fodder. My job has been sapping my energy lately so I'm not feeling terribly creative. Someday I'll write again.

ap_aelfwine May 9 2007, 21:20:05 UTC

Lovely.

I like the slow building up of it, and the idea of Luna rescuing Gabrielle, as it were.

And I hope the sweet young thing married M. Pelletier next was someone of much the same sort as Blaise Zabini's mother, and gave him exactly what he deserved. ;-)

ireneadler May 23 2007, 09:19:15 UTC

Thank you! This was fun to write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it. Luna certainly helped, but I have no doubt that Gabrielle could have rescued herself. Those Veela girls are tough. *g*

Hee. I hope so too. Poor M. Pelletier....

wakemeup89 June 23 2007, 14:35:34 UTC

I saw you in another community and I thought you might be interested in checking out this community as well.

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