This might just be me not having English for a first language, but on page 2 the sentence: "none of which made for particularly good camouflage in the brown rushes surrounding the pond"; shouldn't that be brushes instead of rushes? (also, I'm not looking for a final final copy, just decided to try my hand at some proofreading)
To be honest, I don't think the Rowling "tone" is that unrealistic. I'm sure most governments would love to have control over the Wizarding World, but practically speaking, it's a world they have no control over that's also no real threat to them (or so it seems) as long as they leave it alone. Why risk an escalating war with a foe you don't really understand when there are so many other pressing problems that directly impact your political viability?
The difference in your series, now, is that the Wizarding World's shenanigans **are** starting to have a Muggle-world impact. If dozens of people are dying in mysterious circumstances, and people are claiming to see dragons or whatever, you're going to have to do something about it. That doesn't mean going full-on Men in Black--for one thing, it's impossible to keep something like that a secret--but I would expect the federal government to start seriously considering intervening on one side or the other, while ordinary Muggles might take matters into their own hands...
If magic were possible and muggles had actual evidence of it, I'm sure pure scientific curiosity would be more than enough reason for them to investigate it. This is the 20th century, technology is pretty much the main determinant of a nations power in most areas. The US would have to figure out how magic worked so that they could be sure the Russians wouldn't just teleport a nuclear first strike into their country and vice versa.
Also, large numbers of muggles were killed in canon HP too, even pre-voldemort (e.g. Hermione mentions muggle hikers getting murdered by giants, lots of other stuff shown or implied).
Muggles realistically would have no chance, because wizards can just imperius, blackmail or threaten a few hundred generals, politicians and media personalities, while also promising to get all “fringe” behavior under control. You can’t lie to wizards, soany covert program would be easily sabotaged. and it’s pretty hard to inform the public about wizards given their abilities to cover their tracks, obliviate witnesses, create unplottable locations and so on.
Muggles vs. WizardsinverarityJuly 7 2020, 15:33:55 UTC
Depending on how you wargame that out, it depends on a lot of things that have never been made explicit in the canon verse.
How long have Muggles (specifically, the U.S. government) known about wizards? How long have they been making plans? How much information do they have about the wizarding world? Do they have any wizards on their side? How effective is Imperius, long-term and against many people? Are Muggles actually completely incapable of devising any means to resist, detect, or counter magic? Even if they have had centuries to study the problem, possibly even with magical allies?
If it came down to all-out genocidal warfare, the sheer number of Muggles with modern weapons would be hard to counter. At the very least, there would be a high body count on both sides.
I randomly scrolled to pages 68 and 69 and noticed the indentations were different. Are the left pages supposed to have more space than the right indents. It seems consistent so I guess the answer is yes, but why?
Also when the section break happens on a page break, it looks weird having no indent. I've also never noticed this before and now it bothers me. :/
The indents should be the same. Can you be more specific? Right now the margins are the same for left and right (though I may need to increase the "gutter," or inner margin), and indents are definitely the same.
As for section breaks that start on a new page, I'll have to look at those (and see what the HP books do). Generally it's bad to have widowed lines, and I'm following the HP convention of not using decorative section breaks, just a blank line, so that means sometimes there probably will just be a new, unindented section starting on a new page.
Ah, looking at it again: The left (even) page outer margin is larger than right (odd) page inner margin (both are left margins). Once I compare from the edge of the text (not from the page), the indents are the same. Sorry about that.
I'd be in favor of decorative section breaks, as I love books full of design flourishes. I also agree widowed lines look...weird.
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rushes surrounding the pond"; shouldn't that be brushes instead of rushes? (also, I'm not looking for a final final copy, just decided to try my hand at some proofreading)
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The difference in your series, now, is that the Wizarding World's shenanigans **are** starting to have a Muggle-world impact. If dozens of people are dying in mysterious circumstances, and people are claiming to see dragons or whatever, you're going to have to do something about it. That doesn't mean going full-on Men in Black--for one thing, it's impossible to keep something like that a secret--but I would expect the federal government to start seriously considering intervening on one side or the other, while ordinary Muggles might take matters into their own hands...
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Also, large numbers of muggles were killed in canon HP too, even pre-voldemort (e.g. Hermione mentions muggle hikers getting murdered by giants, lots of other stuff shown or implied).
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How long have Muggles (specifically, the U.S. government) known about wizards? How long have they been making plans? How much information do they have about the wizarding world?
Do they have any wizards on their side?
How effective is Imperius, long-term and against many people?
Are Muggles actually completely incapable of devising any means to resist, detect, or counter magic? Even if they have had centuries to study the problem, possibly even with magical allies?
If it came down to all-out genocidal warfare, the sheer number of Muggles with modern weapons would be hard to counter. At the very least, there would be a high body count on both sides.
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Also when the section break happens on a page break, it looks weird having no indent. I've also never noticed this before and now it bothers me. :/
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As for section breaks that start on a new page, I'll have to look at those (and see what the HP books do). Generally it's bad to have widowed lines, and I'm following the HP convention of not using decorative section breaks, just a blank line, so that means sometimes there probably will just be a new, unindented section starting on a new page.
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I'd be in favor of decorative section breaks, as I love books full of design flourishes. I also agree widowed lines look...weird.
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