Back Bay, I.3

[intralimina]

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III. Daylight: Charlie

I wake in softness. Feathers cradle me below; feathers warm me above. I think I'm in heaven, but then my eyes open on M's guest room, looking just the same as it had the night before.

How many nights before?

I stretch and feel fine. I poke my feet out from the

Comments

[contentlove]

This is fucking GREAT. Please tell me it's a book and I can read it.

[intralimina]

Hee I'm glad you like it! It's a book in a sense... it's mostly a writing experiment and an excuse to learn Photoshop better, but with pubic posting keeping me from being lazy. The plan is 6 short stories of 5 episodes each, each one told from a different character perspective, that together also tell a single story arc. Episodes will continue to be posted here for the duration of the whole big arc.

[contentlove]

That's great news, I look forward to reading them.

[shamebear]

Nice story! :-)
As an aside, which I only mention since it's on a topic of great interest to you, is a juxtaposition between your writing and an interview with the autist Michael Barton [1] I don't know his position along the spectrum, but he says he has severe problems with metaphors and figurative speech. I was at first curious to see how fiction without such techniques would read, but I quickly noticed that you do employ them. As in "spidery sepia", "slick with moonlight", "breaker of sadness" and "like the night killing the sun".

Is this something that influences your creative writing? Or do you juggle metaphors as effortlessly as a magister ludi?

[1] http://www.newscientist.com/article/dn21657-mapping-the-language-minefield-for-kids-with-autism.html

[intralimina]

Thanks for the nice story note

[shamebear]

I thought some of the metaphors may not actually be methaphores for you. :-) I recall once you accidentally described a matrix or a vector to someone the way you actually see them. (Which you also allude to here [1]) It could have made for a good scifi story, if only someone hadn't visualized the matrix on film already :-P

Could it also be (and here I'm brainstorming) that how you see the world more fragmented aids in developing metaphors? For instance, if you pick up the texture of handwriting independently from the letters, it would be easier to see that a particular line could just as well correspond to the leg of a spider as the leg of a letter.

Glad to hear you're still pursuing systems science. :-D I finished my AI PhD and is mostly doing project management these days, but I still get to play with AI concepts. Not to mention that the systems thinking I aquired during my master isn't half bad as baggage during project management.

[1] http://mathart.livejournal.com/6586.html