FIC: Aresto Momentum (3/3) (Draco Malfoy/Hermione Granger)

Dec 11, 2011 11:06

Title: Aresto Momentum (3/3)
Author: captainraychill
Characters: Draco Malfoy/Hermione Granger
Prompt Number: # 85
Word Count: ~24,750
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Alternate universe after mid-Book 6/EWE, angst, darker than prompt implies, explicit sexual situations, unabashed romance, infrequent but extreme profanity, alcohol consumption, reference to rape and ( Read more... )

.het, *fic, a: captainraychill, p: draco/hermione, *2011 fest

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xfsista December 11 2011, 18:54:55 UTC
Be still my heart! This was fantastic! Mystery author, you really ticked my angst & romance boxes.

I thought the way you wrote how a Muggle-born would react to the Dark Mark was really a unique idea. And I loved that the book in question was To Kill a Mockingbird.

And I don't know why, but it made me happy that they didn't go all the way in the Divination classroom. It's already kind of a questionable action to Obliviate her in the first place, but had he erased that, it would have felt like it had gone to far. So, I feel like that was a really good choice on your part.

Anyway, there was a lot I loved about this story. I could list a dozen more things. Really fantastic use of the prompt!

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captainraychill December 21 2011, 20:48:46 UTC
*does the happy dance*

I am so glad that you like it! What a nice review!! Thank you!!

I think it was an instinctive choice not to have them have sex in the classroom - saving the big sex scene for the end and all that. So I'm glad it worked on that level for you.

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rzzmg December 11 2011, 20:40:22 UTC
This was SUCH a wonderful story! It contained all of the elements of this couple I adore: snarking, fighting, passion, and an unrequited love actualized at long last. Kiki was wonderful, Scorpius was hilarious, and I loved the alternate history you created here (esp. the relationship between Draco and his parents). The Dark Mark making Hermione sick was a trope I've read before in other fic, but it worked so well here and you put your own original spin on it - NICE! The use of "To Kill A Mockingbird" worked extremely well, too, in being an example to Draco. The frottage in the Divination Tower was HOT, and the culmination of their love on his study desk, and then his bed was BEAUTIFUL!

I loved this story so, so much! It's going to my favs now! *claps enthusiastically*

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captainraychill December 21 2011, 20:54:41 UTC
When I read this review, I couldn't have been happier!! *grinning a silly grin* Thanks for the lovely review!!

At the risk of sounding like a fangirl, finding your stories on Fanfiction and following the trail from them to your blog to your pimping posts to LiveJournal - is why I found LJ in the first place. Now I'm in deep with three prompts/fests after this one and I'm writing all the time. So thank YOU for that.

As an aside, I really liked the alternate history for the Malfoys that grew out of this, too. Plan to write a side story about from Narcissa's POV, while at Shell Cottage. :)

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jdphoenix December 12 2011, 00:42:46 UTC
From the minute I started reading this I was completely swept up in it. This was such a moving piece and so original too. I honestly had no idea where things were ultimately headed until well into the second third. Though I did know this was likely going to be one of my favorite fics very early on. Beautiful job. This was absolutely amazing and a real treat to read.

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captainraychill December 21 2011, 20:57:22 UTC
Oh my gosh, what a sweet review! Thank you so much!! *blushes*

I particularly like that you weren't sure where things were going. When I got in "deep" with the writing, I had no idea if any intended suspense was working any longer. I knew what was going to happen and all clarity on that went out the window.

Thank you!!

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evil_kitten18 December 12 2011, 12:43:16 UTC
No amount of words can describe this extraordinary story! One of the best I have read so far! You are really talented!!!

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captainraychill December 21 2011, 21:02:21 UTC
Yeah!! Your review makes me so happy! So does your kitten icon (does that mean there are at least 17 other evil kittens on LJ?) Thank you so much!

To reiterate, I loved "Compare and Contrast" and not just for the locker room sex. Although that was AWESOME. Very sharp Pansy, fun Cormac.

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evil_kitten18 December 21 2011, 23:31:18 UTC
I'm glad you are happy and I want to know if you will publish the story on another site. And this is kind of awkward but the story "Compare and Contrast" it's not mine.

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captainraychill December 22 2011, 00:35:16 UTC
Oh shite! Awkward all mine - I am sorry. I got my evils mixed up, never a good thing.

I would like to publish it on FanFiction, which is also Captainraychill. I only have drabbles and a Drunkfest fic on it now. I have never really checked out Hawthorne and Vine.

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namelessamelie December 19 2011, 23:59:29 UTC
Beautifully written. There was so much I loved about this story, I don't even know where to start. You clearly put a great deal of thought into every little detail, Mystery Writer, and it absolutely shows. This was a lovely, heart-wrenching, intoxicating story, and I know I'll be returning to read it again!

Just a few of the things I adored:
- Your phrasing was often absolutely gorgeous, a stand-out example being "...her expression as smooth as an egg."
- Everything about Kiki. The epilogue with her and Scorpius was fantastic, and I also loved the moment when she was scheming to impress Hermione by telling her that Draco never beat his elves.
- I couldn't help laughing at “I would never splinch us.” Great callback. =)

I'm sure I've forgotten tons of other moments and lines, but there were too many to count! This was a wonderful story, and thank you so much for sharing it with us!

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captainraychill December 21 2011, 21:16:16 UTC
I am blown away! Thank you so much for this and your other reviews. They are so thoughtful (literally full of thought, which I love) and very sweet. They made my day and still do. (In fact, a few months from now when work sucks and I am low, I will probably come back and read them while eating chocolate.)

Glad you liked the callback - me, too!

As an aside, about Lucius and Narcissa ("pale hair intertwined in the sand") I loved writing this bit at the beach and plan to write a side story from Narcissa's POV, while at Shell Cottage. If I can stop committing to fests.

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