Title: Aresto Momentum (3/3)
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captainraychillCharacters: Draco Malfoy/Hermione Granger
Prompt Number: # 85
Word Count: ~24,750
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Alternate universe after mid-Book 6/EWE, angst, darker than prompt implies, explicit sexual situations, unabashed romance, infrequent but extreme profanity, alcohol consumption, reference to rape and
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I thought the way you wrote how a Muggle-born would react to the Dark Mark was really a unique idea. And I loved that the book in question was To Kill a Mockingbird.
And I don't know why, but it made me happy that they didn't go all the way in the Divination classroom. It's already kind of a questionable action to Obliviate her in the first place, but had he erased that, it would have felt like it had gone to far. So, I feel like that was a really good choice on your part.
Anyway, there was a lot I loved about this story. I could list a dozen more things. Really fantastic use of the prompt!
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I am so glad that you like it! What a nice review!! Thank you!!
I think it was an instinctive choice not to have them have sex in the classroom - saving the big sex scene for the end and all that. So I'm glad it worked on that level for you.
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I loved this story so, so much! It's going to my favs now! *claps enthusiastically*
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At the risk of sounding like a fangirl, finding your stories on Fanfiction and following the trail from them to your blog to your pimping posts to LiveJournal - is why I found LJ in the first place. Now I'm in deep with three prompts/fests after this one and I'm writing all the time. So thank YOU for that.
As an aside, I really liked the alternate history for the Malfoys that grew out of this, too. Plan to write a side story about from Narcissa's POV, while at Shell Cottage. :)
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I particularly like that you weren't sure where things were going. When I got in "deep" with the writing, I had no idea if any intended suspense was working any longer. I knew what was going to happen and all clarity on that went out the window.
Thank you!!
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To reiterate, I loved "Compare and Contrast" and not just for the locker room sex. Although that was AWESOME. Very sharp Pansy, fun Cormac.
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I would like to publish it on FanFiction, which is also Captainraychill. I only have drabbles and a Drunkfest fic on it now. I have never really checked out Hawthorne and Vine.
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Just a few of the things I adored:
- Your phrasing was often absolutely gorgeous, a stand-out example being "...her expression as smooth as an egg."
- Everything about Kiki. The epilogue with her and Scorpius was fantastic, and I also loved the moment when she was scheming to impress Hermione by telling her that Draco never beat his elves.
- I couldn't help laughing at “I would never splinch us.” Great callback. =)
I'm sure I've forgotten tons of other moments and lines, but there were too many to count! This was a wonderful story, and thank you so much for sharing it with us!
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Glad you liked the callback - me, too!
As an aside, about Lucius and Narcissa ("pale hair intertwined in the sand") I loved writing this bit at the beach and plan to write a side story from Narcissa's POV, while at Shell Cottage. If I can stop committing to fests.
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