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FIC: Blissful Ignorance (or The Folly of a Fool) (Zacharias Smith/Asteria Greengrass)

Dec 01, 2011 07:48

Title: Blissful Ignorance (or The Folly of a Fool)
Author/Artist: enchantedteapot
Characters: Zacharias Smith/Asteria Greengrass (implied Draco Malfoy/Asteria Greengrass)
Prompt number: 154
Word Count: ~7000
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: Bad language, scenes of a violent and sexual nature, a whole lotta angst.
Summary: His relationship with Asteria brought Zacharias ( Read more... )

.het, a: enchantedteapot, p: zacharias/astoria, p: draco/astoria, *fic, *2011 fest

Comments 15

rzzmg December 1 2011, 18:20:20 UTC

POWERFUL, author! I found myself feeling the gamut of emotions with this piece: disdain for how Zach treated Asteria so badly, disapproval for his self-pity and his self-destructiveness, and compassion for his torn-up heart. I'm not quite sure if he really was in love with her, so much as obsessed with her and the idea of her being his. The potion - a BRILLIANT plot device & so original! The ending... *shivers*... what a lovely round circle you've woven.

I've never considered this pair before, but this story certainly has got my mind interested.

FIVE STARS!

enchantedteapot January 16 2012, 20:25:36 UTC

Merci, merci! Zacharias was amazingly fun to write, so complex - I wanted him to be the same usual arse we know and hate from canon and yet still he was having this horrible thing happening to him. Was it his own fault, did he bring it upon himself or is it really Astoria and Draco doing the wicked thing? Does Zach even love Astoria, or is it the idea of her?

To be honest, I'm still not even sure but I kind of like it that way ;)

*sigh* Slytherins can be so sneaky.

wwmrsweasleydo December 2 2011, 23:47:03 UTC

This is a great story. Poor Zacharias. I love how you wove the memories intot eh present and that awful moment at the end where it looks as though all of his efforts were for nothing and his misery is destined to begun again.

enchantedteapot January 16 2012, 20:22:30 UTC

Thank you! I tried so many different ways, trying to stick the flashbacks in there so I'm glad the final structure worked. Merci for the lovely review!

kerplankia December 3 2011, 03:07:40 UTC

Wonderful! I was pulled in right away by the desperation Smith had.

Love the memories, love the way that Smith does not notice how their "love" was crumbling down around him.

Also loved the end; one cannot really escape love, can they?

enchantedteapot January 16 2012, 20:19:18 UTC

"One cannot really escape love, can they?"
I'm so pleased you said that, that was one theme I was desperate to get in there - the idea of everyone almost being trapped in this endless cycle, whether they want to be or realise they are or not. It's quite a haunting idea, don't you think?

Thank you for the lovely review!

kerplankia January 17 2012, 03:44:24 UTC

I also just noticed how many times I used the word "Love/d" in that post. oops. Hee hee.

elle_blessing December 3 2011, 08:53:26 UTC

ANGST. I love it. I love your interpretation of the prompt... the song is so lilting and almost sweet sounding, but the lyrics are not so much. I think you really captured the essence of it here, how misplaced love can make a fool of you over and over again, or perhaps that a fool will always misplace his love, and is thus bound to do it over and over ( ... )

enchantedteapot January 16 2012, 20:07:54 UTC

I'm so pleased you enjoyed it! And thank you so much for leaving the prompt - the song is amazing, so haunting and interesting, it practically wrote this whole fic for me.

I think I did envisage something along the lines of Astoria gradually realising Zacharias wasn't all he was cracked up to be, whilst simultaneously being swept up by Draco - although I did try and keep it ambiguous. Half the time I was writing this, I was itching to write the same events from either her or Draco's POV. Really love the idea of Draco seeing the weakness and the strain between the two of them and pouncing... Will have to wait for a rainy day I think :D

Zacharias was fantastic fun to write and I'm not usually a fan very good with the minor characters so I'm so pleased he came across as real enough and fleshed out. I wasn't so sure I liked him either writing this!

Thank you so much again for the wonderful prompt, it was a creative gem!!

captainraychill December 4 2011, 11:54:43 UTC

No, Zacharias, don't do it!! (I said this out loud right after reading this piece.)

This is beautifully written start to finish and structured very well. I was in suspense the whole time, wondering what had happened and if he was going to take the potion and what it would do to him. Great job!

enchantedteapot January 16 2012, 20:13:08 UTC

Ha! Oh, I reckon he deserves everything he gets, don't you? Thank you so much for the lovely review and I'm so pleased the structure worked - flashbacks can be so darn tricky! Merci :)