In Our Bedroom, After the War; GSF; NC-17 (7/9)

[insunshine]

.part six.

Comments

[ext_63023]

Hey, honey, I'm still reading, but I wanted to point out that you've got a lot of notes from your beta still in your text. Like: His mother looks up from her waffles and smiles. "We already know about the bi, sweetie, you don't have to to tell us again." (I just….Mama) And various notes about your verb tenses, and Jon Denver's name corrected to John, etc etc. It started around part 4, I think, and this section had a lot of them.

[sinuous_curve]

*headdesk*

Thanks. MArianna's in Canada at the moment, so I'll let her know so she can fix up the sections she posted and I'll do the same for mine. :D

[ext_63023]

No worries! It's a lovely story, but I keep getting bumped out of it by editorial notes. :(

[sinuous_curve]

Okay, I got into Marianna's account, so hopefully everything is fixed now.

*crosses fingers*

[daydreambeleevr]

Jon, who takes great pride in the fact that he is the only real boy in his group of close friends, (though with the fuzz beginning to fill in on Spencer's cheeks, he may have a little bit of competition; but he won't worry too much until it takes less than a suitcase and a half to pack all his shoes)

Ha! very funny. Totally relieved Jon is going to Vegas.

k =)