Comments | inky_plumes: FMA: What is Lost (GEN, one-shot)

lady_addiction in inky_plumes

FMA: What is Lost (GEN, one-shot)

Sep 12, 2005 17:44

So this one-shot is for harumi who requested Ed as: the way I like him best is single, and very obsessed with alchemy. I like him as the scholarly type, the one who would rather read up the latest theories than go out on a date with a girl (or boy).

harumi, like I mentioned before, it didn't quite turn out the way it was supposed to be and the characters ( Read more... )

Comments 5

harumi September 13 2005, 01:59:56 UTC

*SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE*

Yay! It's FMA gen! And it was good gen. I love stories where Ed's on the other side of the gate in OUR world. ^_^ This was a wonderful piece of work. You work so well with the FMA universe. The scenery, the setting, it was so vivid I could view it the way I'd view a movie. I could also feel the tension, the sad, longing and regret Hohenheim felt as he looked after his son from a seeming distance.

And I liked how he ignored all the girls. ^_^

I wish you could write a similar theme, but this time place Ed back in his world.

Could you do it? Please?

*dances*

lady_addiction September 18 2005, 03:37:19 UTC

I'll try and see if I can come up with another FMA fic! I'm glad you liked it! ^_^

kye_kestrel September 14 2005, 18:47:07 UTC

You know, I wonder why you're so afraid of receiving critical reviews. If all your writing's as good as this, you won't be getting negative comments, apart from the occasional typo or grammatical error alert. I mean, I could already tell that you're really skilled after reading the first paragraph alone.

about genius that it all too often appear to replace common sense

"appear" - Shouldn't this be in the past tense? Or if "genius" is singular, "appear" should have an "s".

Wonderful descriptions... And I could feel Hoenheim's longing to be accepted by Ed, and his pride at Ed's accomplishments. You used all the right words to convey all the right emotions, both Hoenheim's and Ed's ( ... )

lady_addiction September 18 2005, 03:39:40 UTC

I hate endings! I think it's because I've started so many fics but never finished them that I've become good at starting fics but terrible at ending.

I tried adding more stuff but everything I add seemed to lessen it's overall impact so I decided to just leave it.

kye_kestrel September 19 2005, 12:04:38 UTC

If you're sure, then. ^_^

And you can just come back to this in the future. The right way of writing the ending might suddenly come to you one day.