Comments | inkcanvas: Naruto: Sand Speak

graychalk in inkcanvas

Naruto: Sand Speak

Apr 08, 2007 02:59

Fandom: Naruto
Pairing: Gaara/Sakura (subtle)
Rating/Status: G / 500 words, complete
Timeline: Post time-skip, likely right after Gaara's rescue mission
Summary: Actions speak louder than words. Or in Gaara's case, sand speaks the loudest.

Author's Note: The last paragraph of this fic was actually written on a scrap piece of paper almost a year ( Read more... )

char: haruno sakura, pair: gaara/sakura, char: gaara, fandom: naruto

Comments 39

riza April 7 2007, 19:53:49 UTC

XD So cute. But now that the sand in her shoes is gone, the sand all over the rest of her will be that much worse.

Very nice. Short and lovely. Just what I needed today. :D

graychalk April 7 2007, 20:15:12 UTC

Aw, thank you! I'm so glad you liked it. :D And yes, the sand all over her is bound to be a torture in itself, though maybe Sakura can work on having him get rid of those too. ;p

Btw, you icon cracked me up. xD

ankukotenma April 7 2007, 20:22:41 UTC

Too cute! Gaara being nice by getting rid of the sand on her feet! She didn't even need to ask he just knew!! ^.^ Thats our Kazekage!

Lee always makes me laugh no matter what! "The Power of Youth!" right on lol!

... yeah

graychalk April 8 2007, 01:12:22 UTC

Gaara has to eventually take advantage of his ability to control sand after all. :D And yes, Lee (and Gai) never fail to make me laugh- they're truly one, or should I say two, of a kind! ^^

Thank you for commenting on the fic! :3

(The comment has been removed)

graychalk April 8 2007, 01:15:00 UTC

Gaara would forever deny it, no matter how much I insist it's his way of flirting with Sakura. xD

Thank you so much! :)

gaarasyami April 7 2007, 20:32:13 UTC

lol that is cute! I love what Lee says. Sand is so icky to have on you! >.<

graychalk April 8 2007, 01:17:57 UTC

Thank you! :3 It's fun writing what Lee (and Gai) would say, simply because that's exactly what they would say. Really gotta love them for that. xD

leilia April 7 2007, 21:37:15 UTC

That was very cute. Gai's response was bloody perfect. And I loved the end to pieces.

You were definitely right about the run-on sentences, though. ~_^

graychalk April 8 2007, 01:27:08 UTC

Run-on sentences seriously chased me like hell for this fic. I don't normally write like this, but it somehow refused to come out any other way for this piece. I only hope it doesn't spoil anyone's reading enjoyment or flow. ._.

Thank you very much for the compliments! I'm so glad you liked the ending, since the entire fic relied on and centered around that last sentence- it would've gone absolutely nowhere without it. :\

Btw, I found it quite interesting that you're the only one who thought it was Gai (as opposed to Lee) talking. It truly can be either one I guess. ^_^

leilia April 8 2007, 01:55:46 UTC

The run-ons didn't bother me. The only place I would have made changes was in the first paragraph since most of Sakura's complaints are independent thoughts/clauses. But it isn't a necessary change.

It's interesting how these little flashfics tend to hinge on either the opening or closing line (and sometimes both.)

I can be either one and oddly I didn't even think of Lee even though I know he was on that mission. It may have been that I just finished reading something else that had more Gai in it than Lee - or maybe I equate Gai with more obliviousness than Lee. *Shrugs* Either works and either is funny.