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[inevitably_grey]

Five Ways to Seem Sacred

I.                                            They seem unbroken,
the broken
the broken

the broken columns
in a reluctant dawn.

The columns whose crippled corners
are anything
                 but weary
in the light
      in broad beams, in scattered beams falling
through the walls’ 
           hole-a mouth to

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[luridlysteph14]

as the rocks fall apart,
as the rocks fall apart,

What's that technique called again? We've started doing poetry again. I got confused between that ^^ and enjambement. Or rather, took a stab thinking perhaps I knew it. Oh well. I sounded smart anyway :D

But yes, does it have a name?

♥

[inevitably_grey]

Anaphoria.Some also calls it repetition, but the proper form would be anaphoria. ;)

Enjambment = linebreak.

Hope that helped. :D

[luridlysteph14]

*headdesk*

Stupid formatting.

I looked it up, and I got Hemistich -- is that right?

even if
...........nothing
...................is there
Go and open the door.

*prays it works*

And it said a series was hemistichomythia. Nice mouthful there!

(it's on my lJ)

[inevitably_grey]

Anaphoria / anaphora. That's the correct one.

Hemistich is used in a metrical verse--usually--and what is repeated is seperated by a ceasura (which tends to be in the middle of the poem), and tends to be an imcompleted sentence.

You'll find many examples of those usages in the 20th century poems.

But I think you could get away with it. The teacher will probably be quite impressed. ;)

[darnusername]

IIII.

How the tip of a wing splits us apart
at sunrise;
we are
where reality and illusion meet.

I LOVE that part. You're a writing genius, James. :) *hugs*

[inevitably_grey]

Thank ya, Gab.