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indyhat

Safe - Chapter 4

May 23, 2007 14:12

Characters: Ensemble
Rating: PG-13
Word count: 1,050ish. I'm going to start posting longer chapters, or we'll be here forever!
Spoilers: AU, but let's say to 1.20 ("Five Years Gone")
A/N: Inspired by the
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nathan, sylar, hiro, heroes_fic, heroes, fic, safe, peter

Comments 28

reiko_forrester May 23 2007, 14:03:04 UTC

Woo-hoo! Sylar, future!Peter, and Hiro thinking about waffles! Mm, waffles. *is hungry*
Nathan is a butthole in any universe, isn't he? :D
I can't wait to find out what happens next! Oh, and too right about the time travel. Eek.

indyhat May 23 2007, 14:12:31 UTC

Sylar

Except he's not, quite. Not yet.

Mm, waffles. *is hungry*

I hear that. I loves me some waffles!

Nathan is a butthole in any universe, isn't he? :D

He has his redeeming features. I'll be sure to let you know when I find out what those are ;)

Time-travel stuff is a mess. It could still completely undo this story - Hiro's arc is one that I'm really struggling to weave into the rest of the the plot.

c_quinn May 23 2007, 15:59:42 UTC

Unholy, and it's his mother's voice he's hearing, now.

No, says his inner voice. Special.

Brilliant.

indyhat May 23 2007, 16:06:47 UTC

That's probably my favourite bit of writing here. Everything else is all about exposition, damn it :-/

Thanks!

betterthanlegos May 23 2007, 16:00:17 UTC

Ooh I'm really liking this. Awe. This part was rather keen:
Unholy, and it's his mother's voice he's hearing, now.

No, says his inner voice. Special.

Well done.

indyhat May 23 2007, 16:07:12 UTC

*g* Evidently, Sylar is going to be popular :)

Thanks for reading!

meli_64 May 23 2007, 16:36:26 UTC

awesome! Hiro's gunna stab Hitler! Or he'll get Peter to kill him! YAY! Take that you Nazi bitch! ;)

I liked this part! It was awesome. Yay Nathan!

indyhat May 23 2007, 19:13:59 UTC

Looking at the amount of text I've got scribbled down for this, I am incredibly tempted just to have Hiro go back and strangle Hitler at birth. But apparently that's not how things are done in fic, so I'm probably stuck with the long and convoluted plot I've written! Bugger ;)

Glad you're liking it :) And so far you appear to be Nathan's only cheerleader! ;)

i_am_badger May 23 2007, 17:03:11 UTC

OMG. Waffles. Hiro. Amsterdam. It's so perfect.

Yep, the Sylar bit was excellent, I concur. And you did such a nice job changing Peter so completely in just a few lines.

indyhat May 23 2007, 19:10:09 UTC

*g* I figured that if Amsterdam isn't actually home of the waffle, it's at least next door.

Thanks - I worry that the scene with Hiro and Future!Peter was a bit sparse, but honestly, that's just how it came out, and I didn't really have time to embellish! Plus, once you've described the scenery as "rubble", there's only so much extra description you can give ;)

Thanks for feedback :)