Fic: And That's a Promise (Olympic swimmers RPS, Michael Phelps/Ryan Lochte, rating: adult)
Once again: ALL THE FAULT OF blindmadness. I think. I can't quite remember. Either I mentioned it and she said, "WRITE IT," or she mentioned it and I said, "I'LL WRITE IT." Anyway. Here be porn.
Summary: Michael's proud of Ryan for [spoiler for 200 m backstroke under cut], so he gives him a present.
( And That's a Promise )
Summary: Michael's proud of Ryan for [spoiler for 200 m backstroke under cut], so he gives him a present.
( And That's a Promise )
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sequal is bound to be amazing ;]
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I guess some concrit! Comments! Ish! Firstly, this passage:
Yeah, Ryan remembers. A guy doesn't forget that kind of thing. "I figured you were bullshitting me, doing macho posturing or something. You didn't think I'd win, right?"
which Simone would rewrite with "I figured you were bullshitting me..." etc. as:
Yeah, Ryan remembers. A guy doesn't forget that kind of thing. He'd figured Michael was bullshitting, doing macho posturing or something. "You didn't think I'd win, right?" I just feel like Ryan's line would be shorter, for some reason ( ... )
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...I'd like to know how YOU would be on the receiving end of a blowjob. IS THERE SOMETHING YOU WOULD LIKE TO TELL ME? Anyway, uh, Michael's hair...is totally long enough for pulling a little bit. It's really short. Ryan had to, like, scrunch his fingers in it. I totally didn't forget how short it is or anything. UM. Yes, I think it'd be just barely long enough.
The Olympics aren't over, but the parts I would write fic about are! :p The U.S. men aren't in individual gymnastics, and swimming is done, so... maybe I should learn something about beach volleyball?
UM, anyway. Yeah, I was thinking that "sleep in it" detail might be kind of stupid--who would DO that?--and then I read an article after I posted about Tiger Woods (? I think it was him--either him or a tennis player) sleeping with his jacket after he'd won something, so. Ryan definitely slept in that medal. *straightens tinhat*
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Re: medal thing, at first I was like, "Dude, why would you sleep in a medal?" and attributed it to character quirk, which it kind of is, but then I thought about it more, and...I mean, come on. This is the OLYMPICS. It is like, the ENTIRE WORLD. That medal is proof that you PWNED THE WORLD. I would eat, sleep, and shower in it! And take it for walks! This is probably not at all what you meant! But it is my own justification... >>;;;
Re: blowjob, UM. WELL. No, this would sadly never be possible! I have never been in any such kind of hair-pulling situation! Haha, I know it was a weird thing to have problems with. But compared to, uh, MY kind of pretty boy, Michael Phelps is, like, BALD, so I did a double-take and had to go back and check. XD;;
YES, BEACH VOLLEYBALL, YES. And you don't even have to know anything! It can be PWP! In the sand! *shifty-eyes*
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This is the OLYMPICS. It is like, the ENTIRE WORLD. That medal is proof that you PWNED THE WORLD. I would eat, sleep, and shower in it! And take it for walks!
*CRACKS UP* Yes, exactly. Ryan pwned the entire world all on his own for his very first time. He deserves a crazy character quirk like that. >__>
Not a weird thing... in fact, I suspect it is possibly a mistake. >_> But idk, I haven't gotten to touch Michael's hair, and my TV is kinda fuzzy, so I can't be sure. In the mean time, I choose to believe it is long enough. Yes.
PWP IN THE SAND WOULD BE PAINFUL, MISS!!
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