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imaginary_rain

Between Two Points Series-Harry Potter

Oct 25, 2011 16:49

Title: Between Two Points Series
Fandom: Harry Potter
Pairing: N/A
Summary: Everyone's dead leaving Harry alone to fight You-Know-Who. With only a few horcrux's destroyed, Harry decides to use a time-turner to go back in time to stop Tom Riddle. Only thing is,he's off on the time by five years.

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fanfiction, tom riddle, harry potter, time-turner

Comments 4

endeleon November 8 2011, 15:35:05 UTC

Hey I found your fanfiction from tumblr(I'm anhourbeforedawn there) :D

I really like this story! I'll read your other ones next. But yeah... CONTINUE! 8D I want to know where Tom is. I have clue what to expect. And of course you didn't say if it was 5 years too early or late in the summary. You tease. :P

imaginary_rain November 9 2011, 01:21:17 UTC

I am such a little tease! I didn't think of it that way until you mentioned it but now its' the perfect troll move! I've actually written the next two chapters ( I don't know why I haven't put them up yet)and am working on the rest. So far I like the way its going, so I'm hoping I can keep going.
Thanks for the review!

p.s. If you don't mind, do you have any criticism?

endeleon November 9 2011, 04:38:06 UTC

Ooooh, yay! Well I am just happy to hear you are continuing. If you want to wait to post them that's cool. :D

Hmm. There are some grammar mistakes. But I think what I would like to see more of would be more introspection from Harry. Canon Harry really likes to think a lot and we really see into his head so much. There is a good amount of it already, but I'd love to see more! I'm not sure which route you are going with Dumbledore so I can't say much there yet(though I did love that line about there being veritaserum in the candy, ha!). He does seem to act towards Harry more in a way that he acts towards Tom though, which I like seeing as he would be rather suspicious of Harry in this situation. But I do hope you don't plan on making him outright evil.
I can't really think of anything else to say on criticism though. :o

imaginary_rain November 10 2011, 03:12:10 UTC

Thank you for the critique, you don't know how much it helps!I'm going to try and get more into his head (I think that the next chapter kind of does that, I don't know). We'll see if I make Dumbledore bad :)

I'm afraid to post the next chapter ,though, because I don't feel like it's my strongest one. Oh well I might as well put it up.