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[imaginary_iby]

This is an unusual one.  The writing style is fractured, but I've done that to (hopefully) give it a sense of tension and confusion.  I'm not sure if it works or if it just comes off as slightly ridiculous.  There's a deliberate use of pronouns, although despite being deliberate I have no idea what I'm trying achieve.

A dormant serial killer returns

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[indigoblue4ever]

Multi chapter fic! Very cool.
A really nice start, I'm looking forwards to seeing what happens next.

ps. Tea should be drunk in moderation, especially earl grey. Tea overindulgence is ugly.

pps. Got my uni acceptance letter for my next course yesterday. Forensic Biology and Toxicology. !!!

[makesometime]

Ooh, I likey. Looking forward to more, and I like the writing style :D

[dragonessasmith]

Very interesting...and of course, I wanna know how Abby's gonna get the guy this time. ^^

[plutos_revenge]

Liking the style of this. It definitely adds to the tension & the confusion -though without being confusing. Uh, if that makes sense...

I love that section comparing Gibbs & Abby; their relentlessness & the caffeine powered attack, different only in the visibility of their anger. Very cool description.

I have some huuuge mugs (it's like drinking 2.5 mugs at once) for my tea. I don't always use them, but I use them a lot. But then, I drink tea like Gibbs drinks coffee so I am immune to overindulgence! That said, Earl Grey is not normal tea (I can't stand it!) so I can see where that would leave you feeling delicate!

[rebellious_love]

I am intrigued! I loved the build up and kept me going, trying to figure out what was going on. I liked how you should everyone's perspective to the history of the case.