FIC, A Sunday Evening Spent At Home, Fred/George/Percy, NC-17

[ifyouweremine]

Title: A Sunday Evening Spent At Home
Pairings: Fred/George/Percy
Rating: NC-17
Summary: The twins pay Percy a visit.
Disclaimer: I don’t own Harry Potter.
Warnings/Kinks: Non-con, incest, double penetration, pseudo-voyeurism, explicit.

Comments

[rinsbane]

mmph! Fantastic. The way you told it all from the outsider's POV works very well, makes you want to press your ear to the wall with her and leaves all sorts of room for us to speculate about what's going on in all three of their heads. And yet at the same time, we get to see the sex. Good stuff.

[ifyouweremine]

Thank your for your lovely feedback, I appreciate it! <333! ^__^

-Miranda

[green_and_warty]

Ah, Percy. My heart aches for him. Those twins :/. Very well done, though I can't.. ack! Agreed with the good choice of POV. ....Percy. ;_;

(One complaint: Twins described as very tall. True of movie, false in book, where they're stocky and shorter, ala Charlie. Ron, Percy, & Bill are the tall ones).

[ifyouweremine]

Thank you, I’m glad you liked it! ^__^
And thank you for your helpful con crit on the tallness line-I was actually pretty iffy about keeping that detail in there (because of book canon), but I left it in because I thought it was an observation my main character might make-the Weasleys, I feel, being a rather taller-than-average family, overall. I definitely see how such an inclusion can be off-putting to the reader, though; it’s definitely something I should change if/when I make a few minor touch-ups on this fic. #nod nod#

<333,
Miranda

[quidditchgrrl]

*fans self* I like the POV from the outside. DP is kind of squicky, but you managed it well and made it hot.

Good job!

[ifyouweremine]

Thank you very much! I’m glad you enjoyed it. ^__^ <333
Also: your icon? Is so. fucking. hot! #stares#

-Miranda

[insipid_paragon]

Oh my god oh my god oh my god. *flails* This is so damn unbelievably good! With the outsider perspective and her running commentary throughout, with the little bits of outside knowledge one would bring, it's all just...just...Amazing. Very, very well done. Very very very. And Percy--gah, I hurt for him, and Fred and George are just. Just so very. Ah!

[insipid_paragon]

Also...This might be an odd question, but your user name makes me wonder...Do you listen to the Happy Bullets?

[ifyouweremine]

No, I don’t listen to the Happy Bullets-should I be? They sound interesting.
My username doesn’t really have any particular significance, actually; I am shallow and just used it because it sounded pretty and wistful and just a little romantic but just a little not, and I was having a hell of a time finding something I liked that didn’t go over the maximum character amount. It seemed distinctly me, and I wanted to snag the name before anyone else realized how unbearably cool it was. #laughs# ^__~

<333,
Miranda

[insipid_paragon]

lol, there's no particular reason you *should* be listening to them. I've actually only heard one song by them, "If You Were Mine," but its lyrics amuse me greatly.

If you were mine we talk profusely about European wine
If you were mine and lived in Wales, I'd set the clocks to Greenwich time
If you were mine I'd carve wax wings and fly directly toward the sun
If you were mine we'd make Marquis de Sade look like a frigid nun

Quite the foot-tappin', peppy little tune. :)

[typecast]

Oooh, this was wonderful. I really love the POV. Hehe, poor Percy.

[ifyouweremine]

Thank you, I’m glad you liked it! <333
^__^

-Miranda

P.S. I love your icon far, far more than I should. LMAO! #hearts#