All I got tonight
Looking back at a few lights on a black backdrop
A partial void mixed with fecal matter and dead ends
The road to success is a maze with two ways through
Conform or get lucky
It began with a bang
The bed sheets soaked
Silencing shouts came
With rebirth pangs
A partial void mixed with fecal matter and dead ends
The road to success is a maze with two ways through
Conform or get lucky
It began with a bang
The bed sheets soaked
Silencing shouts came
With rebirth pangs
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I don't mean to sound discouraging and to be without any actual helpful advice instead of just saying, "It sucks!" but at the same time, I don't think it works all that well. It doesn't feel cohesive enough, the focus seems disjointed.
Sorry if it's not what you wanted to hear.
Your song you played at the open mic was cool as all hell though. Do you have it recorded?
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