“I think you mean roguishly handsome,” Dom protested...
"...without having to resort to using brute force on innocent garments"
"...it was a look that, had a poet seen it, he would never have been able to continue his work, for no written word would ever live up the radiant life captured in that one perfect moment."
"The rain fell steadily on the roof, a soft lullaby which went unnoticed as they drifted to sleep wrapped in each others arms."
it's the attention to the small details that fill out a story and make it strong, as you've wonderfully demonstrated here. the banter between the two of them was clever and fun. i like that you were also able to take a situation (their first time) that's been described in several dozen stories and put your own spin on it. i hope you continue to post your work. i look forward to reading more from you.
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“I think you mean roguishly handsome,” Dom protested...
"...without having to resort to using brute force on innocent garments"
"...it was a look that, had a poet seen it, he would never have been able to continue his work, for no written word would ever live up the radiant life captured in that one perfect moment."
"The rain fell steadily on the roof, a soft lullaby which went unnoticed as they drifted to sleep wrapped in each others arms."
it's the attention to the small details that fill out a story and make it strong, as you've wonderfully demonstrated here. the banter between the two of them was clever and fun. i like that you were also able to take a situation (their first time) that's been described in several dozen stories and put your own spin on it. i hope you continue to post your work. i look forward to reading more from you.
kerry =)
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speaking of such a crazy idea...whens a good time for me to make a trek over to your house.
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