"Tempted" Ch 10 - Finished

Sep 28, 2009 23:22

Hi everyone, it's been a long time! The next installment of "Tempted", my John/Ellie fic, is  ( right here )

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an_ardent_rain September 29 2009, 04:04:08 UTC
Oh, awesome chapter! I can't wait to read more. :D

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icebreather September 29 2009, 05:26:43 UTC
I will really try hard to make the wait not as long as the last one!

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vandevere September 29 2009, 19:10:27 UTC
At least this breakup didn't leave Devon looking like a cad. I've always hated those fanfics which did that. Devon's a nice guy, who would never hurt Ellie if he could help it.

*THIS* breakup was two, mature, people realizing that they were, perhaps, not right for each other after all...

Vandevere

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icebreather September 30 2009, 06:14:39 UTC
I'm glad to hear someone likes how I've handled Devon - cus I like him, too (most of the time). Just not with Ellie!

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greenowl October 7 2009, 21:56:18 UTC
Holy sh*t sauce, that was amazing!

*clutching your ankles and weeping with joy for the fabulosity that is the angst!!!*

Love these sentences (and secretly wishing I had written them):

Well, and that his kisses were like manna from heaven to the starving.

Break it off? What, like a Kit-Kat bar?

He was trying too hard to be normal. When what would really have been ‘normal’ was for him to acknowledge that they had had, and still had, problems. Big problems. Perhaps, Ellie had realized yesterday, insurmountable problems. He had secrets of unknown gravitas; she had ones that were ocean-liner-sized.

Her mind raced with possibilities. He’d sold their house to Morgan and Anna at a quarter of its value so they could learn to be adults. He’d emptied their savings so he and some buddies could take a heliboarding trip around Nepal. His parents asked to move in with them after they were married, and he’d told them ‘yes’ ...

YOU ARE MY GODDESS!!!

Please write more soon!

Your drooling fangirl,

Green Owl

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icebreather October 8 2009, 03:11:21 UTC
LOL, you are too funny. Thanks so much for letting me know exactly which parts worked for you! As you know, since you're an excellent author, that's very helpful.

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