Heroes fic: Countdown

[icalynn]

Title: Countdown
Author: icalynn
Pairing: Mohinder/Sylar
Word Count: 505
Rating: PG-13
Prompt: New Year's Resolution
Summary: Mohinder has an unexpected visitor on New Year's eve.
A/N: A ficlet written for the mylar_fic holiday prompt, New Year's Resolution. Beta'd by the lovely brandinsbabe <3

Comments

[takhallus]

Cool! Love it!

Just one thing, when you say 'his lips seer' I think you mean 'sear', as in burning or chafing. A seer is like a prophet or clairvoyant.

[icalynn]

Thanks, that's what I meant... and both BB and I missed it! *facepalms* Fixed it!

Lol, thanks for reading it and commenting!

[levitatethis]

Holy hotness. There is so much intensity and passion conveyed in the build up here that I didn't realize I was holding my breath until the end. I love Mohinder's internal struggle between what he knows he should and what he is actually feeling. It's so him to momentarily succumb, to allow himself to feel it, before he's trying to deny it and take back control of himself.

What's wonderful is how sparse the dialogue is yet how their actions say everything -- Sylar's smugness, his stride, his invasion of Mohinder's space as if he belongs there...Mohinder's awkward attempt to get away, that panic and yet desire coursing through him, arching into Sylar's touch...the staring (or better yet, eyefucking since that's actually what they do)...

Excellent!

[icalynn]

I really wanted to show their actions, the build up in the ten seconds before midnight... and the staring? lol, they were so eyefucking! Hee.

Thank you so much for reading and commenting!

[ladywilde80]

Oh wow. I love how your wrote this, very inovative and very cool. The tension was awesome, and incredibly hot.
Nice work. I liked this one a lot. ^_^

[icalynn]

Oh, thank you! I thought it fitting for the prompt!

Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

[toestastegood]

That'd be one hell of a way to break in 2009! ;)

[icalynn]

Oh, yeah! *g*

Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

[brandinsbabe]

what i love about this is that you did an awesome job with description. i could feel the intensity and the turmoil going through mohinder's head.

<3

[icalynn]

And I always worry the most when it comes to description! *g*

Thanks so much for all your help, <3