FIC: The Art Of Love [Naruto].
Title: The Art Of Love.
Fandom: Naruto [manga].
Rating: R.
Genre: Angst. Full of annnnnngst. But with a happy ending. So kinda epic fail angst.
Summary: Prompt: "There were certain unchangeable rules for Team 10: Ino was the one who went out and got the good stuff. Chouji was the one who went out and got the bad stuff. Shikamaru was the one who ( Read more... )
Fandom: Naruto [manga].
Rating: R.
Genre: Angst. Full of annnnnngst. But with a happy ending. So kinda epic fail angst.
Summary: Prompt: "There were certain unchangeable rules for Team 10: Ino was the one who went out and got the good stuff. Chouji was the one who went out and got the bad stuff. Shikamaru was the one who ( Read more... )
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"He never dreamed." I don't know why I'm so drawn to that, but I am. Simple, but perfect and, oddly, totally IC. Love.
"They had all picked Yondaime Hokage, and his legacy was apparently-" Umm, sorry, but I'm a tad confused. I know Twitch checked over it. Is the emphasis on "had" as in 'they all did'?
"After Asuma's death, they had clung together, afraid and unsure and just a little bit angry." Fuck! Loved that, too. Damn, if I could, I'd quote every sentence.
"Affection is separate from love; the trick is to discover exactly how to measure the warmth of the one against the heat of the other." Holy crap, Science.
"Ino, who smelled of flowers, who always walked with a spring in her step, and who cried the least and the hardest of the three of them," Oh man, I think that has to be one of my favorite lines. It's absolutely perfect"There was a look in her eyes, an unfathomable attitude of knowing that seemed part of her very presence, as if she'd ( ... )
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"They had all picked Yondaime Hokage"--no, the deal with that is that the story itself is in past tense, so, since the students picked their essay topics before the story actually takes place, the phrase ("They had all picked Yondaime Hokage") would be in past perfect tense, or whatever it's called. Not that. Something. Ask Twitch. The tense that indicates action that happened before a story in the past tense. Yeahhh. No emphasis placed on 'had'. God, this is a horrible explanation. Ask Twitch. XD
TEMARI IS HOT SEXY SPIKY-HAIRED SHIT, AMIRITE. *sexes her*
Thank you so much for all the nice things you say about the shit I write! <3 You are delicious. *licku* And I'm glad you liked it, because. I did not. 8U HOORAY FOR THAD.
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I'm still kinda confused. I shouldn't have said anything since I have no idea what I'm talking about half the time, anyway. :X
YES, YES SHE IS. I'd hit it like a tennis ball, baby.
It's all true~ 8U
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Okay okay okay do you know why I love this? Why? Because I love this so hard.
This is so deliciously subtle. I love subtle. ty. Subtlety. That's it. Yeah, I love the delicious subtle. (Look, I am drooling. I am sorry I am so incoherent, but I am DROOLING. I cannot help it. Your awesomeness renders me. drooly. Agh. And plus, you do not need me to write you a Shikamaru/Chouji fic, you wrote this and now I feel stupid and inadequate and gimmicky.)
ANYWAY SO THIS IS DELICIOUSLY SUBTLE. The way you half-hint at everything, the way the reader has to build the backdrop, I love it. Chouji in an abusive relacion? Yes. (Did I just say that in Spanish? What?)
I love the tone you have for this. It's quiet. Tense. Very full of unspoken things, rather like the story itself.
Plus, your characterization for Shikamaru = teh w1nz0rz. And his relationship with Temari? YERRSS.
Staying in Konoha: it was almost like ( ... )
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