Oh, excellent. I love how you approached the theme. This is really a touching story, and I enjoy all of the characters and their relationships, and how much you manage to convey about them in such short snippets. Very good writing.
Yeah, I tried to go at the theme at a different angle instead of random person meets a ghost or something like that. No real spirits, just a group of people haunted by a memory.
This is amazing - I love Donatella's attitude and the total authority she has over the memory of her mother, the way she does know what's in the closet and has planned carefully the things that should be kept, and the hints you worked in of her mother's life without going into so much depth it disrupted the flow of the moment. I also adore the way you have mixed cultures with no cumbersome explanations, just letting their names and attitudes draw up the image of the people involved. Thank you for writing this.
I really like this story. I wanted to express a different sort of ghost story with this, that people don't have have to be haunted by the actual spirit of someone to still be haunted by them. And the mixed cultures thing was really easy, even though I had to keep on taking out references in the very first draft to where I wanted to be set. I did leave a few clues in though, if you can catch them.
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Yeah, I tried to go at the theme at a different angle instead of random person meets a ghost or something like that. No real spirits, just a group of people haunted by a memory.
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I really like this story. I wanted to express a different sort of ghost story with this, that people don't have have to be haunted by the actual spirit of someone to still be haunted by them. And the mixed cultures thing was really easy, even though I had to keep on taking out references in the very first draft to where I wanted to be set. I did leave a few clues in though, if you can catch them.
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