this was. okay, this was weird. like really weird. but in a good way, you know?
i wasn't sure i really understood it but you have a really awesome way with words. i love the sentences you have and how they go together.
the last line and this: Infection, too subtle, went unnoticed, progressed invisibly, erupted unchecked, arranged his limbs hither-and-thither in a shape that augured doom. In another geography it was love.
Really interesting story. I like the things you do with language here- the pure sounds and rhythm of the words, and the anachronistic feel of many of them paired with the futuristic setting. Very cool.
oh, wow. I would read this again as poetry. It is atavistic and strange - and I love love love that your otherworld is so genuinely other in terms of psychological setup, and that this effect comes not only from concrete details but on the level of language itself, in speech patterns, thought patterns.
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i wasn't sure i really understood it but you have a really awesome way with words. i love the sentences you have and how they go together.
the last line and this: Infection, too subtle, went unnoticed, progressed invisibly, erupted unchecked, arranged his limbs hither-and-thither in a shape that augured doom. In another geography it was love.
it was lovely.
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Also the Dragoon is really cool XD
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