"You know?" "Right. Yes." "You do?" "No."
Hey look what it is, guys, it's more Fire Nation Macbeth! Finally!
Title: Lord of Fire, Lord of Night (3/?)
Summary: A land torn by rebellion. A fearless general and his ambitious wife. A prophecy that will change everything. Sound familiar? Well... not quite. IN THIS CHAPTER: The Firelord is dead. The remnants of the royal party have to move fast ( Read more... )
Title: Lord of Fire, Lord of Night (3/?)
Summary: A land torn by rebellion. A fearless general and his ambitious wife. A prophecy that will change everything. Sound familiar? Well... not quite. IN THIS CHAPTER: The Firelord is dead. The remnants of the royal party have to move fast ( Read more... )
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On the deck, the remnants of the royal party have the look of people who have just finished being extremely busy.
Her face is bright red when she returns to the group, but she’s enough of a soldier to act like it isn’t.
He’s holding the ember again, rolling it between his fingers, and somehow this isn’t surprising anymore.
It isn’t a mob, not yet, but one push in the wrong direction would be enough.
I've come up with what I think it is while copying those lines over. I think you never say how people feel. Even when you do. It's never so-and-so felt this or so-and-so thought that, it's always a description of appearance or a statement of fact, and usually phrased in this whimsical-but-detached way or some such. It's really nifty.
Also, you've been using a lot of knife metaphors, which is clever. Keep that up.
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