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[iamascavanger]

Title: Trying to save you (lamelamelametitle)
Author: Lovemyfaceoff
Recipient: Butterflyweb
Genre: Angst
Prompt: Too little, too late
Rating: Hmm R I guess.
Summary: Sylar goes to Mohinder for help after Hiro almost kills him. Mohinder holds a small hope that he can save Gabriel.
Word Count: 1584

Comments

[whatwas]

Their kisses were slow and sour with sadness. Mohinder didn't realize the salty taste was from his tears at first.
I absolutely loved this part.....
good job on this!!!!!

[butterflyweb]

“You always wanted to know if it was enough. Being a watchmaker. Living out your life quietly in the clock shop. You wanted it to be special. It was. It is.”

That...hurt. Deeply. Beautiful, beautiful dialogue there and I love the idea of Mohinder sitting in Gabriel's room, reading his journals, trying to reconcile Gabriel with Sylar. Lovely.

[iamascavanger]

Thank you so so much,.

[ivy_b]

I liked this. I'm not sure if Mohinder actually knows about Gabriel- I'm sure it should be in Chandra's files somewhere. I liked how Mohinder tried to save Gabriel, tried to learn more about him and how violently he reacted to the dead body- I like the conflict in him. And then Sylar just made him dinner, so casually like nothing ever happened.

"“You are far too sensitive for your line of work.” - Gee, Sylar and Chandra agree on something.

Just one mistake: "“You're Mother's apartment.”- your.

[aunt_zelda]

Whoa ...
Damn, why can't I find adiquate praise these days? Grrr ...
This was beautiful, horrible, and very, very sad. The smut was kinda bitter, but in a good, believable way. Well done.

[lovemyfaceoff]

Thanks a lot.
♥

[aunt_zelda]

Welcome! *tries to make a heart and fails*
(Hope this'll do!)
<3

[cazrolime]

I really like this -- it's very poignantly written, and I especially like the line:

Lying to her made his heart beat with guilt. He wondered briefly if Sylar could hear it in his sleep.

...because it just feels like Mohinder's thinking of Sylar is flowing out of his character rather than being forced, if that makes sense. I love Mohinder's attempts to persuade Sylar that he wants to be redeemed.