LJ Idol Week 11 Part 2: If the Creek Don't Rise

[i_love_freddie]

I watch the river

Comments

[roina_arwen]

Very nice and evocative.

[karmasoup]

This is painted with such voluminous and intriguing imagery! Nicely done!

[i_love_freddie]

Thank you!

[static_abyss]

I read this three times. The first time I noticed the imagery, and I especially liked the rusty bikes and the shoes. The second time I read it, I ended up thinking that maybe it could be written from one person's point of view. So for fun the third time, I read it as though someone had been throwing bodies into the river and didn't want them to be discovered. All of that is to say, this was a very interesting poem.

[halfshellvenus]

Really nice. I love how you inverted the prompt, and made the 'danger' be the exposure of things that should stay hidden.