Comments | i_am_davnee: Fic: Private Screening

i_am_davnee

Fic: Private Screening

Jul 12, 2009 23:40

“Be serious,” came the laughing reply. “Do this for me and I might even shave it.”

“I’m not that dumb or lucky, Bill.”

Lee chuckled as he reached forward and grabbed his drink. None of them were that lucky. He didn’t know what the hell his father was thinking when he’d brought back that look. He was sure that any day now the Old Man would ( Read more... )

adama/roslin, fanfic, bsg

Comments 117

icedteainthebag July 13 2009, 04:42:40 UTC

Okay, I need to leave some feedback here like now.

Here, you have given me the most fantastic fic I can ever imagine:
A/R, without Bill's cock or frakstache.
Laura, getting herself off.
Lee, getting off, watching Laura, get herself off.

OMG, I'm in heaven, and you don't even know what this has done to me.

There were SO many parts that made me laugh here. I laughed so hard through the first half I was rolling.

The first two discs had fairly promising titles, Pour Some Sugar on Me and Sweet Asses of Kobol.

Sweet Asses of Kobol, the new fanon standard.

He just wanted to see more of this Laura. Happy. Healthy. And clearly right where she wanted to be, and with the person she wanted to be with. Not such an easy place to find.

This was beautiful. I nearly teared up. In the middle of a crackfic.

“Not as sexy as you must feel wearing only that pornstache.”

Laughed SO HARD. I hate that motherfrakkin' pornstache. Flavor saver my ass.

She turned her head back to smile coquettishly over her bared shoulder before letting the robe ( ... )

somadanne July 13 2009, 04:52:43 UTC

OK, what does it say about me that your feedback to this fic made me laugh almost as much as the fic itself?

Love you!

icedteainthebag July 13 2009, 04:56:51 UTC

I just had to give it so much love. So much hard, hard love!!

katamarann July 13 2009, 05:00:57 UTC

Amazing that you typed that all with one hand. I just wanted to say that. And drop this icon like it's hot. Cuz you know it is.

Your icon makes me lulzy.

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lis_pendens July 13 2009, 04:46:14 UTC

He gets off AND then makes it so his Dad can too. That's love. Frakked up and insane but love. Speaking of love, I love this. But now I'm going to go to bed with some crazy dreams. LOL! Eh, I still love it!

i_am_davnee July 13 2009, 05:12:52 UTC

Sorry for causing crazy dreams. Lee's one frakked up dude, but kinda sweet in his own fat, confused way. Glad you enjoyed! ♥

kastari July 13 2009, 05:01:18 UTC

OH MY GAWD! I am laughing so hard I can't breathe! Do you have any idea how clever this idea is? How much you've nailed the voices of all 3 of these characters? How real it is & I feel that's the most important thing for a writer to do--get the audience to believe? It was frakked up, sweet, funny. This is one of my favorite porny stories. So I guess I've just admitted that I read them. I can't write them, but I love reading the great ones. This is a great one ( ... )

i_am_davnee July 13 2009, 05:35:28 UTC

Wow! You totally get the gold star for ossum feedback tonight. Thank you so much. :D This fic just kind of evolved as I wrote it. Was supposed to be utter crack, and then Lee went and got kind of sweet on me. *shrugs* Glad it turned out to be just sweet enough to make even Fat!Horny!Lee lovable.

kastari July 13 2009, 05:44:37 UTC

Seriously, would love to friend you. Looking forward to catching up on your stories I've missed reading (I'm new to this BSG world) & future ones you've still to write.

It really was a fabulous piece.

The whole thing about the brothers finding their dad's porn was totally a real thing. Loved it.

i_am_davnee July 13 2009, 05:49:19 UTC

Seriously, would love to friend you.

LOL, just beat you to it. And welcome to the BSG world. Hope you'll love it here!

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flamingo55 July 13 2009, 05:14:55 UTC

LOL, I feel like my feedback will be inadequate now. :)

This is amazing - I love it, and I find the whole thing utterly believable. The way Lee ends up in his dad's cabin, with no worries about interruptions, the search for porn, and the tape itself - and why it was made. I can absolutely see her doing that for Bill, and I can absolutely see Lee reacting that way. You = ossum.

Also, you made this sweet and tender in the midst of hot pervy porn. That is quite a feat. *applauds*

And then you killed me ded with the end - awww, Lee. Somewhere under that whiny exterior is a nice kid, lol.

i_am_davnee July 13 2009, 05:44:24 UTC

I feel like my replies are the same too. :)

Glad you enjoyed. This fic was a lot of fun to write, even when it was squicking me. I'm happiest of all that people are buying into the set up. That's always so great to hear.

(((Flamingo)))

37_soul_sister July 13 2009, 06:39:16 UTC

wow. you made this work perfectly.
In addition to this being really hot, I love that Lee saw the intimate moments and loving exchanges as well as the other stuff. And how he acknowledged that that was what he felt like he was trespassing on.
and I LOVED the last little moment of giving his father the gift he knew he wanted and needed. That was really sweet.

i_am_davnee July 13 2009, 15:17:47 UTC

Thanks! I had no idea when I started writing this that Lee would end up not looking like a tool. That was a nice surprise that I'm glad others enjoyed. :)