LJ Idol, Season 9, Week 27: Open Topic

[i_17bingo]

Comments

[tsuki_no_bara]

i remember her from previous entries! i like her. also, i love that two rednecks not only own a yorkie but gave her a male name. (and i'm curious who she's named after.) the dialogue in this is great - "of course you're stupid. you're a fucking dog" followed by "of course you're happy. you're a fucking dog". and rafaela uses logic with the wraith, which is pretty cool. and there's an illustration! bonus. :D

[i_17bingo]

I'm curious about Arnold's name too. That was one of those things I threw in because it sounded just weird enough to be true. Maybe I'll write a story about her.

[bleodswean]

Fantastic entry! I really enjoyed the tone here, the back and forth, both by Rafaela, and the narrator! It's rollicking! I also enjoyed how you took a potentially angsty sidestory regarding the manifestation of the wraith and stayed on track with your quick and efficient story telling. This was REALLY visual and all the action worked well. Props for a small dog owned by questionable rednecks! ;)

[i_17bingo]

Now that I've piqued my own interest in Rafaela's backstory, I'm worried I'm going to go a little dark, so it's a relief that this one didn't turn out that way--even though I went epic with the action and injuries. And thanks for the comment on the visuals; action is my weakest area, in my opinion.

[adoptedwriter]

The dialogue really makes these characters come alive. Awesome! AW

[i_17bingo]

Thanks! I love that they live on the page, because that's what I want most.

[roina_arwen]

See, it's lines like this one that make me love you! ...Yorkshire Terrier, a breed that was almost unrecognizable without a debutante attached to it

Fabulous entry! :)

[i_17bingo]

I've always wanted a little yappy dog like a Yorkie, but I realized I'm not enough of a fashionista to pull it off. Though, during my trip to New York last month, a crazy homeless person pointed at me and said, "And there's Miley Cyrus!"; so maybe I should consider it.

[halfshellvenus]

Haha! The beginning of this was funny enough, but I loved the ending-- the reasoning with the ghost and sending it to find something other than trouble, Rafaela's father, and then her being grounded at the end. Just perfect. :D

[i_17bingo]

I mean, that ghost was being such a dick!

[halfshellvenus]

:D It was-- keep your problems to yourself, and stop tormenting other people because you feel guilty! Jackass.

[i_17bingo]

At least see a therapist.