(And We Can Have Forever) In Our Own Little Corner Of The World - Part 2

[hynotic_n_crazy]

Merlin comes to Avalon again and Morgana answers, she wants to tell him to leave he knows but Arthur appears behind her, his hands settle at her hips and Morgana goes to lean back into him but stops, Merlin is there.

“It’s ok.” Arthur tells her, “Let’s go somewhere and talk.”

Morgana hesitates but nods.

“Ok.” She says in a softer voice than

Comments

[alphabet26]

Really interesting story, I enjoyed it very much!

[hynotic_n_crazy]

thanks for reading and even more for reviewing! i love knowing what people think about my writing! glad you enjoyed it!
love you icon btw!

[kreuse]

That's a great piece of writing. I had to copy-paste the link because they are not working (you may want to fix that), and I'm very happy I did. I don't know what part I like best, Arthur being broken by his memories and Morgana watching over him, Merlin realizing he spent lifetimes to wait for something that is not there anymore, and simply the fact that Brittain has a new ruler (Willam, I suppose?, the newpaper's thing is genius) and he doesn't want to be King anymore.

Thanks for writing,

K

[hynotic_n_crazy]

wow thanks so much! it's so sweet of you to thank me for writing haha i've never really been thanked haha i'm really beyond thrilled that you liked it (and yes in my mind it was William that Arthur mentions i mean the world has moved on from stories of Arthur so if he came back he'd take someone's place and i needed a way for him to know Brittan was getting a new leader and all the press him and Kate have been getting even here in Australia (where i live) well i imagine it would be triple in the UK so yea)
i just figured if you got what you had wanted but never been able to have why would you trade it for something you'd had already?

[anonymous]

It's a lovely story, very original, and with a beautiful, flowing feel to the narrative (I loved the added details like the photo of the couple, who I assume is Kate and William, at the end - it really emphasised the timelessness of the trio) but you need to be more careful about spelling and grammar. There were mistakes in nearly every sentence, words that didn't fit, and phrases that needed to be separated by punctuation.
(Also Brittan is spelt Britain, and I know it's picky but in Britain the currency is the pound, not the dollar. It's not exactly important, and being English probably makes me twice as sensitive about factual errors when a story is set in Britain than any other non-British readers would be, but mistakes of any sort always give the impression of laziness - even though you have clearly put a lot of effort into creating what is otherwise a stunning piece of writing.)

[hynotic_n_crazy]

thank you for your feedback i honeslt y appreaciate it you were right about most thing though haha i'm an Aussie but also i can be pretty lazy but the reason there's probably so many mistakes is that i was in a rush to post it for christmas since i'd told some people i'd postit for christmas and then i've been so busy over these last few days i haven't come back to check it with grammar and stuff
anyway i'm glad you reviewed!