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smorfiett August 28 2011, 23:31:55 UTC
Excellent story!

You really captured them, it felt like it really was Ian that told the story. The first part made me smile because it felt just like a real Lunch Time :D The end was intriguing, please make another part soon!

Also, you made me think of that they had a Dailybooth. THANK YOU! Funny Smosh-picture HEAVEN! :D

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hvnlyumbrlla August 29 2011, 01:17:13 UTC
Yay :D I tried to make it Ian-y. I want it to be as realistic as possible. And yes, I quite enjoy their dailybooth also :3 I wish they updated more though haha

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hvnlyumbrlla August 29 2011, 01:18:29 UTC
I have some interesting plans as to where this will go *cackles*
I'm glad you liked it :D

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hvnlyumbrlla August 30 2011, 16:45:17 UTC
Haha! I have the feeling they think that sometimes, with all the weird twitter questions and mail they receive xP

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orangefriday August 29 2011, 02:15:04 UTC
You got Ian just right :) And I immediately went to dailybooth to check out their photos right after reading this!

Wonder what will happen next? *dun dun dun dun*!!

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hvnlyumbrlla August 29 2011, 02:35:03 UTC
*does a goofy victory dance* I'm glad you find Ian, Ian-like :D
Their dailybooth= amaaaaazing <33
And yes, dramatic music is required for what I have in store for them! >:D

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mutual_death August 29 2011, 04:58:54 UTC
I almost missed this before going to bed!! Blasphemy! lol

I'm in love with your banter!! It sounds so much like Ian and Anthony...and this is a great start to a fic (slow but I can tell it's going to pick up REAL soon). [= I'm so excited for the next part.

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hvnlyumbrlla August 30 2011, 00:53:50 UTC
:) I'm glad you caught it before sleep claimed you :P
I have the next part done... but I'm still reading it over and over like a crazy person, trying to perfect it! Haha <3

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mutual_death August 30 2011, 07:05:21 UTC
Uh oh, you're starting to sound like me. I do the exact same thing. It's hard being a perfectionist.... lol

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hvnlyumbrlla August 30 2011, 16:36:01 UTC
Tell me about it! I read a story over so many times I'm pretty sure I can recite it... :P

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boredomdelux August 29 2011, 15:19:56 UTC
WWWHIIIIIIIIOMG ahem, sorry 'bout that X)I just got done reading your other story, and now I'm excited there's more :D
Can I just say that I totally dig your writing style? You totally captured Ian spot on, as everyone else has pointed out, and the first part could seriously be a real Lw/S! lengthy wiener sucking, aaaaahahaha XD
I like that you are not throwing any romance/chrushes into this first chapter, it makes it a great introduction and build-up to the rest of the story. Professionally done! ;D I'm definitely gonna be stalking this story, so be prepared ;) You're seriously good, I'll look forward to more! :D

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hvnlyumbrlla August 30 2011, 00:56:15 UTC
You make my life with your extra-super-awesome comments of utter hyperness <333
All I can say is thank you thank you thank you thank you, second part will be up soon. Prepare yourself though, because its a little slow :P
As for where I learned to write, I suppose I can thank the multitude of bitchy english teachers I have received xD

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