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Challenge #1 (July) - Carousel, Part Two

Sep 19, 2009 21:07

Title: Carousel Author: celadon_55 Genre: Gen Characters: Don (surprise!), Nikki, David, Colby - it's a WIP, so who knows who else might show up? Rating: PG 13+ Warning: violence Spoilers: Um...Season 5? Summary: written for Clue Challenge #1, July 2009 athurt_don. Prompts: Who? - Don. What? - Fireworks. Where? - Park. ( Read more )

genre:gen, rating:pg-13, genre:whump without plot, fanfiction:monthly prompt, character:nikki, character:team s5-, fanfiction, author:celadon_55

Comments 13

aleo_70 September 20 2009, 02:26:19 UTC

Yipes! He's in serious trouble now.

A heartbeat and breathing are kinda important to a fella's health, y'know?

C'mon Nikki, get him going again...

And Yay! on the posting, looks like you got it nailed.

celadon_55 September 20 2009, 02:43:43 UTC

Like I'd let Don off that easy. :)

As for the posting...well, nailed might be kind of an exaggeration, though I appreciate the support. I think we'll file this one between "wing" and "prayer".

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celadon_55 September 20 2009, 02:45:32 UTC

Thanks. :) Cliffhangers are kind of a running theme with this one - it's a little "meller-drammer".

And don't ask how many versions were posted and came down before this one finally made the grade. It's just sad.

valeriev84 September 20 2009, 04:08:45 UTC

Hey, it worked!

I wondered where all of the comments from earlier had gone, but I guess they got deleted in one of the repost attempts, no?

Great job with getting it up like this now, though.

celadon_55 September 20 2009, 04:31:31 UTC

Yeah, our previous conversation is lost in cyberspace. After all those adventures in posting I need a drink and a three hour nap.

Thread 5

valeriev84 September 20 2009, 04:09:41 UTC

Here, I had a quick look through my e-mail and found the comment I'd made when you first posted:

Oh, this is fantastic! I love it and can't wait for more!

I think Don's right, the bad guys may well have been herding them towards that tunnel, in which case Nikki did exactly what they wanted her too.

I love how Don's vascilating between being a kid and being an adult.

I'm curious to see where you're going with this. Do we get any hints as to how long this will be?

celadon_55 September 20 2009, 04:34:16 UTC

Amazing you have this!!!! As I said, the title partly refers to Don's vascialltion between states of consciousness. And I wish I knew how long. I intended short, but sometimes they have a mind of their own.

valeriev84 September 20 2009, 05:01:03 UTC

*grin*

Well, see, I've got LJ set up so that I receive e-mail alerts when someone replies to an entry or comment I posted and since you replied to what I posted, I had both your reply and my original comment in an e-mail in the trash of my hotmail account. If you hadn't replied, then it would indeed have been lost in cyberspace.

As I said before, I totally underwhat what you mean with the length thing and I like how you've got a double meaning thing going for the title.

Can't wait for more.

valeriev84 September 20 2009, 05:01:56 UTC

Understand! I meant understand, not underwhat, I've not a clue where that came from!

mali_eppes September 20 2009, 09:46:43 UTC

whoa!! could you please stop with that mean cliffies??? ;-)

great story. love that you write from nikkis pov. i kinda like her in the show. soo yayyyy finally a don whump fic with her!!
so please post the next chapter soon.

loozy September 21 2009, 11:17:32 UTC

Yay, the posting worked!!! :D

Excellent chapter!!! Gripping and intense and filled with whump, even if it is the repercussions of the whump :D

Love it!