OP Fic: Nothing to Choose (Part 5)

[hunterwithcause]

Title: Nothing to Choose - Part Five
Author: hunterwithcause
Fandom: One Piece
Pairing/Characters: Strawhat Pirates
Genre/Category: What If?
Rated: PG-13
Word count: 1000
Warnings: implied character death
Spoilers/Setting: Set sometime after Thriller Bark
Disclaimer: I don't own One Piece.

Summary: A sum is made up of many parts. Take one part away and the sum

Comments

[schokoccino]

Great! Simply great! =D
At first I was kind of confused about how you started telling which one of the crew is dead and what problem they have to deal with after his death. But I'm really impressed how it turned out. It isn't so sad like the others but I think it's one of the best. Because Usopp has really grown and because he keep all the knowledge of doom to himself... I don't know, but I like this one the most... at the moment xD

BUT - I'm confused myself because I think I've found some things which are wrong didn't fit:

lovingly cared for tools
Sorry, but I don't get it... it doesn't make sense to me x'D

likening
I'm not sure, but shouldn't it be liking or something like that? Or better: What does this sentence want to tell me? Anything else than that Robin isn't Usopp's type?

Anyway: You amaze me with every part more and more =) I'm looking forward to the next ones and I'm really excited to read the final part.

[hunterwithcause]

Holy crap, you're quick! xD Merry Christmas! *hugs*

re: Lovingly cared for tools: It should tell you that the tools are well cared for (i.e. handled with care; kinda like the tools in the school workshop aren't xD). They were Franky's and I imagine he would take care with them.

re: likening: *headdesk* You're right, of course, that's supposed to be liking >.> *cough*Streber*cough* That sentence should tell you that Robin is more perspective than Usopp would like, as in, if any of the crew could figure out that something was wrong, Robin would be and is the most likely

[schokoccino]

Merry Christmas! *killingly hug* Have you got what you wished for? (Besides of the Twilight-Box and the... knee... kneepad

[red_savant]

Ah, yet another good one. With Franky gone... geez. Having another ship to care for, knowing he wasn't good enough... poor Usopp.

Just one thing: instead of perspective, you want perceptive. They're related, but not the same thing. =)

[hunterwithcause]

Just one thing: instead of perspective, you want perceptive. They're related, but not the same thing. =)

Gah! I swear, one of these days I'll actually catch stuff like this when I proof read my stories before posting! *headdesk*

Thank you! Especially for pointing out my mistake! :D

[samej]

Hi! First comment here but I've been hooked to this fic because I love the idea. Angsty as hell, but well-written and in character as long as I've read.

I only guessed the idea of a Devil Fruit because I read it in a comment, I wouldn't have guessed that the plot could be going that way.

About this one, I love, LOVE the Usopp's pov and the last sentence is brilliant. And robin, oh, so perceptive and smart.

Waiting already for the next one (specially for Luffy dissapearing!) :)

[hunterwithcause]

I'm glad you like it! And that you think it's in character (which is one of my biggest concerns)! \o/

I was quite surprised that red_savant figured it out that quickly, truth be told.

Thank you! I'm always happy to hear that the chosen POV for a chapter works!

Haha, you'll have to wait a bit for the Luffy part, I'm afraid, because I'm nervous about people's reactions, and so I'm procrastinating writing it for as long as possible.

Thank you so much for taking the time to review! <3

[red_savant]

It's my go-to guess: when something crazy happens, it's a Devil Fruit! Or just a mystery.