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"The Pilgrim's Progress"

Feb 18, 2006 22:20

Author: bennmorland
Title: The Pilgrim’s Progress
Challenge: Post-Hogwarts #6: Dumbledore’s Tomb
Summary: A man older than his years returns to a mentor’s side.
Rating: PG
Genre: Nostalgia - not angst.
Word Count: 1,366
Beta: Many thanks to mudblood428 and madoldmrsfigg for being patient when I was not. :)
Notes/Warnings: None of the characters are mine, I take no money for this, ( Read more... )

author:bennmorland, 4th wave:fic, 4th wave

Comments 34

reallycorking February 19 2006, 07:35:36 UTC

Beautiful. I love how you've portrayed Ginny-delicate and strong at the same time. I also love the bit comparing the mapping of freckles to mapping the stars in the sky.

The flashes of memory and the strong visuals (like Grawp's trail of destruction, the quietly sucking Dumbledore card) really pull this thing together nicely.

Do you think I have critique? Naww, you're fantastic. :D *goes to bed*

bennmorland February 19 2006, 20:55:33 UTC

The bits of which you speak I'm especially proud of. ;D

Do you think I have critique? Naww, you're fantastic. :D *goes to bed*

HAHA! I wish.

_mea__culpa_ February 19 2006, 15:30:44 UTC

Ooh, I like the poem. =)

I loved the whole thing, it's so well written. I can't wait to read it again.

“I haven’t been to see you since I attended your -” he hiccupped. “Ceremony after Sixth Year. A lot’s happened since then. Voldemort’s taken care of. The Order’s disbanded and gone its separate ways. But I’m sure you know all that already.”
That made me most sad, definitely nostaligic... especially the underlined bit, makes me think of our class... that was my world.

It must be hard seeing people that are no longer with you in moving photos/cards/etc. And I like the bit about Nick. =)

bennmorland February 19 2006, 20:53:01 UTC

especially the underlined bit, makes me think of our class... that was my world.

I know just what you mean. Gawd, I miss that group...

_mea__culpa_ February 19 2006, 22:53:12 UTC

I miss that world. *sigh* I need to write an entry about that too.

bennmorland February 20 2006, 08:48:38 UTC

OO-OO-DO!

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flyingcarpet February 19 2006, 22:53:39 UTC

Very nice -- and a great job for a first effort. I hope we'll see more from you in the future. :)

bennmorland February 20 2006, 08:40:01 UTC

Oh, you betcha. ;)

hrmm eviepup688 February 19 2006, 23:39:24 UTC

I hate harry potter.

but regardless of that...nice.

Re: hrmm bennmorland February 20 2006, 08:38:44 UTC

Thankee! And I know how much of a punishment it was for you to read it. ;)

mudblood428 February 19 2006, 23:47:33 UTC

*does a dance* Congratulations! You already know this, but I love your story. Awesomeness. :D

bennmorland February 20 2006, 08:38:13 UTC

LMAO I love your icon! Still up for tomorrow?

mudblood428 February 20 2006, 15:08:23 UTC

Unfortunately, I'm still in the Chesapeake Bay area and am unsure as to what time we're getting out of here (it's all dependent on what time my roommate is able to drive us back). I can't imagine that we'll be here for too much longer, but let me take a raincheck just in case. Are you up for grabbing coffee or something in the evening sometime this week?

bennmorland February 20 2006, 23:46:07 UTC

I should be free Tuesday evening. Howzabout you? Let me know via email!