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3 Column Challenge

Jun 18, 2005 23:36

Author:

starlakitty

Title: A Birthday Surprise

Challenge: Three Column Challenge. I chose Ginny's birthday, a baby bonnet, and a Muggle street in London

Summary: I don't want to give the whole story away (it's not very long!) but it is basically about Harry wanting to find the perfect gift for Ginny's birthday. He wants the gift to symbolize something very ( Read more... )

3rd wave, 3rd wave:fic, author:starlakitty

Comments 16

mrbubblesandme June 19 2005, 15:52:51 UTC

awww... so sweet and cute. i liked the description of the baby bonnet. simple... very nice. and haha i was wondering when someone would say "when will we start" and then go "now" lol...great story again.

starlakitty June 19 2005, 15:58:58 UTC

oohhh thank you! i was so very nervous! this is my first ever hpgw fanfic. i'm really very glad that you liked it! :)

mrbubblesandme June 19 2005, 16:40:32 UTC

can you read mine, cause it was my first too! lol... i write h/g fics all the time but this was for show...

nellie_darlin June 19 2005, 17:07:08 UTC

This is really cute, and a good story. Harry is slightly too articulate for me, but that's a personal preference and not one I'd impose. Besides, he gets nicely nervous again, and you captured the mood very well. Good fic!

starlakitty June 19 2005, 22:06:41 UTC

You know, I really didn't think of that myself. I have a tendency to write like I speak, and this is my first ever fan fic. In my first draft, my Ginny was really ditzy and bubbly and magicofisis kindly pointed that out so I could change it and make Ginny who she ought to be!

Thanks for the compliment! I'm so glad you like it!

mary_v June 19 2005, 17:08:59 UTC

I had tears in mnye eyes by the end of this. *sigh* beautiful. I'm in love with Harry- he's just so romantic and perfect. *sigh*
Brilliant. Wonderful. Im adding this to my memories!
~Maria~

starlakitty June 19 2005, 22:06:55 UTC

*blushes*

thank you!

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starlakitty June 19 2005, 22:09:32 UTC

Yeah...I think I could have done something about the beginning, too. I was in a bit of a hurry to write it because things suddenly got crazy with work and everything. Also, I don't have a lot of expierence writing fiction (especially not fan fic, this is my first one!) I definitely agree with you though.

I probably should have done at time jump. Like, "After weeks of searching..." I tried to do that but I didn't articulate it well enough.

Thank you though! I like receiving constructive criticism because it helps me learn how to write the stories better in the future!

desi_dukes_99 June 19 2005, 21:41:51 UTC

AWW, that was a really sweet fic! in the beginning I thought Ron would think Harry was having an affair with all the fake excuses and such, then tell Hermione, who would tell Ginny, who would slug Harry when he was trying to give her the bonnet, but I'm glad she didnt, cuz his face is oh so pretty and it would be a shame to harm it.
_+*Desiree*+_

starlakitty June 19 2005, 22:09:49 UTC

hee!! true!!

thank you. :)