Involved

[grungeous]

Author: grungeous
Title: Involved
Challenge: 40 - Ginny's mad at Harry and he doesn't understand why.
Summary: ‘Irregularity is the key to the lack of love between us’
Rating: I think PG-13, for some dirty words
Word Count: 2'277 (wow, never thought i'd write more than 100)
Notes/Warnings: my Mother and notthequiettype beta read it - thanks Grlz...
Better? :)

Comments

[anonymous]

I'm afraid the whole story is a little scrambled and very confusing. If you work on developing a coherent and believable plot before you actually start to write, your stories can only improve. Hope this little bit of advice helps.

Mike

[quidditchpup]

whoa, you seriously need to slow down in this story. Add more description and more into the charecter's reactions.

There's also a few places where the narrator suddenly is Harry when it hadn't been before.

[grungeous]

hm... so, all I can do is have a close look at it, follow your guides, and maybe it will be better...

all in all, thanks fot the tips :)

[eimajunknown]

um. overall, good story. but maybe read it over a bit or get a beta.

-eima

[laffalle]

Well... I must admit that the previous version was not good at all. I know that you can do better than that. This one is much beter. If you aren't sure if your stories are good, use a beta reader every time. The difference between these two version is visible, and that's what it's all about with betas. :-) As I said, you can do better (I just know that) Thank you kindly for your attention ;-)