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[lifelessmidget]

Decided to post something for your criticism/enjoyment/whatnot ^^ x-posted in places

Title: A reality in a fantasy 
Type: One shot
Author:

Comments

[6whitelighter9]

niiiiiiice, tres groovy (i love the idea of rough sex). friend me coz i want 2 see more of your work.

[lifelessmidget]

LOL my journal doesnt have um.. stories in it.. i cross-post in places and you have read one of my first smuts so *grin grin* ^^

[shprdofthenght]

omg amazing...

[tarajw]

Holy hell!

*fans self

Got I love wildly fucking Draco.

[hasheel]

wow.. uh.. yea, wow!
lol

but for criticism...hmm the last sentence seems a bit awkward.

He cast the same cleansing spell and fragrance smell except with a sight change, instead of smelling like cinnamon and mint like Harry’s spell had procured, Draco’s one smelt of strawberries and powdered cocoa, a signature scent of Harry Potter.

maybe cut out a bit and make it: He cast the same cleansing spell and fragrance smell except, instead of smelling like cinnamon and mint, his smelt of strawberries and powdered cocoa, a signature scent of Harry Potter.

lovely fic though!

[crimson_caress]

*phew*

HOT!!!