Page of Swords FIC - Part Two

[lotrwariorgodss]

Title: Desires of the Damned (2/2)
Length: 12,300
Main character or Pairing: Draco-centric, Harry/Draco
Card: Page of Swords
Rating: soft R
Disclaimer: Anything recognizable isn't mine, it belongs to Jo and WB and whoever else has a legal claim.
Author Notes: See Part One for full header.

Comments

[owens_mom]

Oh, I really enjoyed that.
When he dreams that night, however, he dreams of Harry and wonders what he misses more: his chance at redemption or his chance at love. - I actually whimpered, at that point. Wonderful flangst.

[lotrwariorgodss]

Thanks! That line was actually a very last minute addition - glad I did it!

[melmoe1]

Beautiful story, so well written. Draco and Harry were perfect.

[lotrwariorgodss]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked the way it was written, especially the boys - they gave me some trouble, lol.

Desires of the Damned

[catsintheattic]

I really enjoyed your story. Especially Draco's inner monologue, and the way you took your time to let him grow. He is my all time favourite character, and I like when he is written in such lovely detail.

I loved Severus in this, how he is caring and yet able to leave the decision to Draco. &hearts

I almost cried when Draco was forced to kill Narcissa, but you used this as a perfect similarity between the boys. Harry's portrait rings true as well, his determination and calculating pragmatism seem cruel, but that's a part of the war he is fighting.

If someone were lying on the ground dying, a normal person would give him a pat on the back and ask if he was okay - Potter would grip him by the arm and ask how badly it hurt. And it takes a subtle person like Draco to tell the difference between the two.

I was shivering when I read this. It simply nails down what they are.

Thank you for sharing!

Re: Desires of the Damned

[lotrwariorgodss]

Thanks so much for your lovely comment!

I really enjoyed doing the characterization for both Draco and Harry in this story - I was trying to make Harry a foil for Draco, where he had gone through some of the same things but knew how to deal with them, whereas Draco was just learning how. I also really wanted to give Draco time to grow up, since that kind of thing never happens in a week, month, or even a year's worth of time, and, of course, I wanted the story to focus on him because of the card.

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[rubymiene]

Great characterization of Draco. I really like Snape telling him he will never grow up until he realizes he is the only one who can save himself.

[lotrwariorgodss]

Thanks! Draco needs some kind of decent father-figure, lol.

[saylee]

Oh, this was lovely, and just so well written. I loved Snape, and Draco, and Harry, all three in this.

[lotrwariorgodss]

Thanks so much! The characterization was my favorite part of writing this story.