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Sep 25, 2005 22:52

Title: Fault Lines Low
Author: hansbekhart
Rating: PG
Summary: For the 500 Watcher Challenge. Sirius/Remus/Snape, sort of. Special thanks to the mods of hp_literotica for creating and nurturing such a lovely community.

( It strikes him that they must all be dead, for surely that is the explanation for this blinded, shuddering amnesia. )

sirius/remus/snape, titles: a-l, remus lupin, 500 words for 500 watchers challenge, sirius, severus snape, hansbekhart

Comments 10

livii September 26 2005, 08:47:53 UTC

Ay-yi-yi, this is brilliant, darling. I love the way you say so much in so little space; for example, He is caught between their solidity, venom on one side, dust on the other.

The writing is lush, and the pacing is dead-on to draw out the story, of which there is lots, even if it isn't perfectly clear or articulated in a traditional format. There's lots for the reader to imagine, and in such a gorgeous piece, I find that marvellous.

hansbekhart September 26 2005, 10:44:01 UTC

Aww, thank you so much. I liked the storytelling even if the story itself is too confusing ... lol plus it was fun to write. Thanks!

underlucius September 28 2005, 13:02:03 UTC

Oh God.

I read this, and I found it difficult, so I read it aloud and it all clicked into place.

*weeps piteously*

I thought ... I thought that Remus was left alone - as usual - but he is dead too - and it's Severus that is the tragedy?

WAH!!!!!!!!

So beautiful. My darling - you are such a talent, I am broken.

xxx

hansbekhart September 28 2005, 19:38:44 UTC

**hugs you like whoa** Your voice post has totally made my week :D. It makes me very happy that reading it aloud worked for you ... I always like to read stuff aloud, especially visceral or slightly confusing things. But thank you so much ... for reviewing and reading, I am seriously all aflutter and felt rather embarassed because my first inclination was to run over and go "OMGSOCOOL!" all over your journal (I'm doing it here instead ;).

kethlenda September 28 2005, 14:13:31 UTC

Beautiful, even though I am slightly confused. :)

hansbekhart September 28 2005, 19:39:16 UTC

It confused me too ;). Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

ladylornadoone September 29 2005, 19:06:07 UTC

Gorgeous. Seriously, I'm so glad you wrote this.

Sorry I'm not leaving you more of a review, your story killed me. Absolutely slayed me with its wonderfulness.

*is dead*

hansbekhart September 30 2005, 23:24:43 UTC

Lol! Any reviews make my toes all curly with happiness. Thank you so much! I'm very glad you enjoyed it.

storyteller September 30 2005, 02:58:29 UTC

Brought here through underlucius' reading -- this is absolutely beautiful! You have an incredible gift with words.

Would you mind if I friended you?

hansbekhart September 30 2005, 23:29:34 UTC

Oh, thank you so much! I'm very glad you enjoyed it. I friended you earlier but didn't have the chance to respond to your review. It's a pleasure to meet you :).