Comments | hp_holidaygen: fic for <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/nicolen">nicolen</a></strong>: Geese (McGonagall, Marauders, Snape, others, PG-13)

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fic for nicolen: Geese (McGonagall, Marauders, Snape, others, PG-13)

Dec 22, 2006 15:42

Title: Geese
Recipient: nicolen
Rating: PG-13
Characters: Minerva McGonagall, Remus Lupin, James Potter, Sirius Black, Peter Pettigrew, Severus Snape, Albus Dumbledore, Poppy Pomfrey
Warnings: The teensiest, tiniest foreshadowings of character death; cruelty to animals
Author's Notes: For the purposes of this story, "the prank" occurred during the ( Read more... )

!2006, !fic, character: albus dumbledore, character: poppy pomfrey, character: marauders, character: minerva mcgonagall

Comments 25

nicolen December 23 2006, 02:38:11 UTC

Oh, my. This is wonderful - thank you so much for this. The foreshadowing was absolutely brilliant at the end - marking them for death as you put it.

I was a little bit thrown by your writing in present tense, but after the first few lines, it really grew on me. I thought the charasterisation was wonderful - especially of Minerva. I thought the line about the students scurrying out of her way was incredibly apt.

Thank you - I've wanted to see this for some time and have never had the time to write it myself. You've written a story that's everything I imagined it would be and more...

chiralove January 2 2007, 20:37:37 UTC

Thanks so much! I was really pleased to learn that you liked it! Happy holidays and best wishes for 2007 to you. :)

melandry December 23 2006, 04:13:38 UTC

This is a very thoughtful story. I like how much meaning and symbolism you've put into the geese, and also the subtle signs of McGonagall's fondness for Sirius (I always enjoy good interaction between those two).

chiralove January 2 2007, 20:38:21 UTC

Thanks! I'm really glad to hear that you liked it. :)

loneraven December 23 2006, 12:16:57 UTC

This is beautiful. I loved your McGonagall, stern and strict but so thoughtful, so full of care for the boys, and I loved your gentle portrayal of Remus's despair and Sirius's contrition. Snape, too, is done with such a light touch, but from the little you give us of him his motivations and anger are really palpable. The writing is so quiet and so textured that the omens and the darkness are much more effectively shown than they would be if you'd been heavy-handed about it. I really loved this story.

One tiny criticism - McGonagall and Pomfrey probably would use "got" for "gotten" in spoken dialogue.

chiralove January 2 2007, 20:40:09 UTC

Thanks! I really appreciate your kind words, and I'm so glad that you liked this story.

Why "got" and not "gotten"? I'm just curious ... I thought "gotten" was correct. :)

loneraven January 5 2007, 15:56:50 UTC

Because "gotten" is rarely, if at all, used in British spoken English. "Got" is used for the participle too.

chiralove January 5 2007, 21:47:08 UTC

Thanks! I never would have guessed. :)

a_t_rain December 23 2006, 16:14:43 UTC

This is darker than I usually like my MWPP fic, but quite lovely -- I love what you're doing with the transfigurations.

chiralove January 2 2007, 20:41:08 UTC

Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it - it was a challenge to keep it from getting too terribly angsty and depressing, so I'm glad you didn't think it was entirely too dark. :)

lyras December 23 2006, 21:33:22 UTC

Oh, this is good. Such lovely details, and an enthralling story to boot. I really enjoyed this - thank you!

chiralove January 2 2007, 20:41:41 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it. :)