Comments | hp_holidaygen: fic for <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/pasi">pasi</a></strong>: Black and White (James, Lily, PG)

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fic for pasi: Black and White (James, Lily, PG)

Dec 14, 2006 14:48

Title: Black and White
Recipient: pasi
Character(s): James, Lily
Warnings: None.
Author's Notes: None.

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!2006, character: james potter, !fic, character: lily potter

Comments 48

There is not enough squee in the world... pasi December 15 2006, 00:29:29 UTC

...to do justice to this subtle little gem. This story is a lesson in how to write suspense. The way those dead birds and mice kept showing themselves among the everyday paraphernalia of milk bottles, reading the daily paper over breakfast, doing the laundry magically so a sharp Muggle kid caught on to you, having your toddler throw rusks at your head...

Those little corpses, and that magpie chattering over them. You just knew that magpie was a Death Eater Animagus, didn't you? Well, I thought so, anyway, because my wonderful Mystery Author played me like a fish on a line, and I loved every minute of it.

Then, when James solved the mystery, the exchange between him and the milkman's son was just so real. You can't pack much more feeling in a few deceptively simple lines than this:

The boy frowned. He chewed his lip, as if choosing his words carefully. 'I seen you,' he said at last. 'You didn't see me, but I seen you. When you put that washin' out. You had a big basket but you wasn't carryin' it. You just waved at it and all ( ... )

Re: There is not enough squee in the world... pasi January 2 2007, 12:29:42 UTC

Aha, now that I see the author, I know why this story was so good. Thank you again!

Re: There is not enough squee in the world... lazy_neutrino January 2 2007, 22:53:12 UTC

Didn't I just say that to you, earlier on? :)

Re: There is not enough squee in the world... pasi January 3 2007, 15:32:01 UTC

Actually, that was how I found out the reveal had happened, when I got your comment notification in my mailbox.

a_t_rain December 15 2006, 03:07:35 UTC

Oh my, what a gorgeous and sad little story.

jetamors December 15 2006, 04:46:08 UTC

This is sweet, and really well done. Lovely slice of life.

melandry December 15 2006, 05:12:09 UTC

I definitely have to echo the description of this story as a 'gem'. It's on a small scale, but so perfectly crafted and balanced - and I must admit that like James and Lily, I thought there was something more sinister going on at first. I like how in some ways, this story is about the war, but in others, it's just about the magical world and our world.

sillyfilly December 15 2006, 05:13:23 UTC

Oh. Oh. Really, beautiful and well thought out. I didn't know how it would come round, and then it did. Just excellent.