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Hold You For A Million Years (PG-13) for the community

May 17, 2009 12:37

Title: Hold You For A Million Years
Author: birdseyeview
Recipient: the community
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Implied off-screen sex, implied off-screen violence.
Pairings: Frank/Alice
Summary: Five silent moments between Frank and Alice Longbottom.
Disclaimer: Characters belong to JK Rowling, lyrics belong to Bob Dylan and no profit is being made from this.
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round: one, recipient: the community, author: birdseyeview

Comments 5

allie_meril May 18 2009, 01:21:17 UTC

*quiet glow of delight* Oh, mystery writer, this is just what I love best! Little snapshots of their relationship evolving: lovers, Aurors, parents, Order members...

I don't know if I can pick a favorite section in particular, they all flowed so well from one to the next. Those last two really pack a punch, though. The desperation of the attack and their fear for Neville, and then the sweet, vague life at the hospital. The last two paragraphs made me catch my breath. :)

Beautiful, beautiful! Thank you so much!

vegablack62 May 18 2009, 04:37:39 UTC

I loved this piece. I just read this through twice to savor it. I loved that the way the story is begins and ends with Alice laying in Frank's arms. You bookended the story well, begining with them lying together moving on to their work as Aurors having them escape a Death Eater attack and then ending with a failed escape from a Death Eater attack and Alice in Frank's arms again.

The dramatic irony of Frank wanting to remember this moment of their first time together, when we know he will lose all memories in the future was poignant. At the same time the ending allowed us to see that somewhere he did. In the end too all they had left was each other.

I liked his happy dreams of the round faced boy.

Thank you for writing this in Frank's pov. People rarely give Frank a voice as a character.

This was lovely. Thanks for writing it.

red_erythros May 30 2009, 12:49:23 UTC

This was just so sad, in the lovely sense. I loved the last part, and how, at least, Frank was aware of what was happening around him despite his condition, and how he was vaguely fond of the round-faced boy. D: Thank you for writing this!

lore June 1 2009, 18:00:50 UTC

Wow! I don't read many Frank/Alice stories, but I can't imagine a more right one. Powerful.

Thank you so much for writing and sharing!

love, lore

merlins_babe November 22 2009, 19:11:16 UTC

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