Flame and Blade

[persephone_kore]

Title: Flame and Blade

Comments

[wulfkub]

Soft and lovely. I love the imagery you use here.

[persephone_kore]

*beams* Thank you. The images kind of lit things up in my mind.

[dreagoddess]

...Oooh! You had me wondering how the heck Helga was fitting in in that! Very good.

[persephone_kore]

*grins* I could probably make this longer if I really wanted to, although that would require inventing the answers to several questions, such as who's wandering around, why, and how far from home.

[dreagoddess]

No, it was great. I liked how at first it seemed like it was going to be something awful (hence my wondering how Helga was fitting in, since I know you wouldn't write her like that!) and then everything that looked bad was twisted in just a few words. :)

[persephone_kore]

*grins* Yes! That's what I wanted to do. (Actually, I figured on having readers start out assuming a witch-burning, but then the part about lighting the fire by magic got into the second bit.)

I didn't think you were telling me I ought to make it longer... I just meant now I'm thinking it could be if I tried.

[unlikely2]

Nice twist. The suggestion that the Founders didn't have all the spells available to a modern generation makes it more real.

[persephone_kore]

Thank you! The spell-development wasn't really on the top of my mind, I admit, but I try to take into account that some hadn't been invented yet, and sometimes that before Hogwarts magical training probably varied rather wildly even among the best trained.

I'm glad you liked the twist. The image appealed. *grin*

[dizilla]

It's good, well done. ^_^

[persephone_kore]

Thank you!