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The Last Crucible

Oct 15, 2005 15:31

Title: The Last Crucible
House: Ravenclaw
Word Count: 100
Challenge: Smoke
Characters/Pairings: Harry, Draco, a rioting mob of Muggles
Author's Notes: This takes place in a distant future. The war is over (Voldemort destroyed) but so many have died in the war that there are very few wizards left. The Muggles, through the war, have ( Read more... )

draco malfoy, author: turin_lover, muggles, harry potter, challenge: smoke

Comments 4

londra October 15 2005, 20:09:41 UTC

oh, I love it. there's just one thing that *slightly* bothers me. Draco's eyes are grey, not green... Other than that, it's wonderful!

alice_pike October 15 2005, 21:27:55 UTC

Thanks, and yah, I know. It was suppose to really substantiate that Harry's imagining what he's seeing, even though Draco really is there. I needed a way to discern between the real Draco and Harry's imagined Draco, and I guess that just didn't come off too well.

But hey, thanks for commenting, and I'm glad you liked it!

dizilla October 16 2005, 05:36:42 UTC

There is no magic to save a witch.

That is a lovely line. My favorite. ^_^ Both versions are nicely done but I do like the longer one. Fantastic job.

alice_pike October 16 2005, 14:53:38 UTC

Thank you! I'm happy that you like that line, because it just sorta came to me right before I posted the drabble. I thought it would be very ironic and pretty frustrating that magic still exists but could never be used.

Thanks for the comments. I'm really glad you enjoyed them.