View of a New World

[howaito_hakuryu]

Another vignette from a character who is becoming a doll. This time it's the little brat Prince, Drien. (And, yes, prince must be capitalized when using it to refer to him. He insists.) I'm not sure if this is exactly him. Still trying to pin it down.

Comments

[dark_skada]

You asked for critique but I'm not sure what you're looking for, however, I do know considering what we've talked about in 'set dressing' I would like to know more about the ship he's on. And hopefully that could easily lean itself into who he is, and what he's doing there.

Also "It was beautiful, in the same way that someone might call an empty lot." is an awkward sentence, in general. I might reworking that, and the entire paragraph it's in, if necessary.

//Unrelated: There is a Green Lantern that is a planet. Yes, the planet is a GL. But anyways, his name is Mogo. And when you first started describing the planet I was like "Drien found Mogo..." and then my brain decided the story would have been like "And then Mogo zapped Drien with GL lazers the end." But Jim told me no. ::pouts::

[teru_is_true]

Jeez. Three words:
What. A. Brat. xD