Sweet Surrender

[hot_4_hahn]

I catch a glimpse of her just as the elevator doors are beginning to close.  Quickening my step I manage to stick my arm in just before they close shut.  Flashing my brightest grin, I’m thrilled to see that she’s alone in the lift.  With that lip purse that I’ve come to know so well, her gaze rises to watch the floor numbers light up above our

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[punky_96]

You SLAY me! Happy Bingo!
I'm so very excited.
Sigh. Must read later... Will be back... I promise :)

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Well it took me an eternity but I'm back. That was so incredibly hot! I loved that he had no relief all day and that the reader got to feel that pressure. I love the secret relationship with the secret panties and then the secret release. The moment when he realized that those panties had touched her and rubbed against her all day? That sentence was all WIN. I could totally see the scene when he moved her legs to his shoulders and changed their position. Beautifully hot. I loved that he wanted her to say it. He could keep it a secret if she would say it when they were together.

And of course he doesn't want to give them back! Fantastic. Excellent as always and happy late bingo :)

[ilovecsr]

Callie's not an idiot? I beg to differ. Both in "reality" and in this horribly wonderful little world. Somehow, you've got me insulting my girl - are you proud of yourself now? God how I love when she makes an appearance in these stories though.

"Briefer than any brief I’ve ever worn, these things have had trouble containing me all day whenever she’s around." Careful, you're almost getting explicit with the het. I know it doesn't translate at all in writing, but that was in a little sing-songy voice in my head, just FYI.

Erica is quite the naughty little tease, isn't she? Why oh why is that so hot? I absolutely can't blame Mark for bowing to her whims, either. I imagine she's quite impossible to resist.

It's unbe-freakin'-lievable how you not only have me reading and enjoying the het, but looking forward to it. I keep saying it, but I really am starting to worry a little. :/

I don't think I can really explain it, but I loved this line: "She slowly blinks open, those blue irises thin rims around her dark, inky pupils." I know,

[hot_4_hahn]

Ah, a goddess indeed.

And don't blame me about the Callie, you're the one writing her all selfish and manipulative and such. You're feeding my desire to insult her. Yeah, I see you trying to deflect. Uh huh

[ilovecsr]

Your desire to insult her doesn't need any feeding :P

I think I may have read that same meta & it got me thinking about it too *smirks*

[hot_4_hahn]

It was pretty fascinating, even though I'm not familiar with any of those pairings. But, the notion that the threesome pivots on one character. I never thought about it in those terms but, it absolutely will for me, I guess for any writer.

I did the pulural scene with callie, but the other was OC. I think having two characters I regularly write is going to completely change the whole thing for me, in a way I haven't considered before.

And what about that bit at the end? Where she talked about the pair that get together because of the missing third person. That really got my brain revved up.

[hahnsrockstar]

She slowly blinks open, those blue irises thin rims around her dark, inky pupils. I nod at her, holding her gaze, as I slide long and deep into her. “Tell me, Erica.”

“I…I can’t.”

“Yes, you can.”

Am I the only one who held her breath at this moment wondering what exactly he wanted her to say to him?

This was a good use of Callie. In the most subtle of ways you showed us that she and Erica are continuing to bond. It makes me even sadder that the show didn't go this route. Hawt Merica while giving us a a strong foundation for Callica.

Also, yay for lace panty porn!

[hot_4_hahn]

Oh, so you were wondering if we're there already with these two? I think I've just begun to formulate a little story arc/twist before we get them to the point of even thinking about those declarations. But, it sounds like you saw the emotion in that little scene. I hoped her eyes would reveal a bit to the reader; an unguarded moment.

And I think we'll be seeing more of Callie going forward. Glad to hear you're happy with that vein.

I really appreciate hearing how this one struck you. Thank you!

[jaguarjg]

3 fics in 2 days, prolific much?? Well I´m not complaining obviously. This was so funny, here was me thinking Erica was just teasing Slone with the panties comment, I laughed out loud when I realized she was wearing his! Excellent! I love this Erica, its refreshing to see her angst free for a change, even though I love a bit of drama

oops

[jaguarjg]

*he was wearing her panties I meant, thats a whole different fic*

[hot_4_hahn]

I'm so glad you thought Erica was just teasing him about the panty line. I really wanted the kink to be a nice little turn in the story, if at all possible. I loved the idea that she could get such a "manly" guy as Sloan to wear her underwear. The woman's got some mojo, huh?

Oh, and thanks for the Heartsways rec. Along with everyone else I adored her Standing in the Way of Control. I just had to read that gem ASAP.

Actually I have been thinking about a more snarky Erica within the femslash vein. But, I think I've developed a habit of writing her softer and more vulnerable with women. So, I'm going to try to write a Valerie/Nancy (Weeds) piece first and see if that helps me jump the track to badass lesbian Hahn. Thanks for the encouragement to explore this route with the character.

I really appreciate your entire comment. There's so much for me to chew on here.

Oh, and your icon f-in' rawks!

[i_ms_hill]

You have made my weekend complete! Two Merica stories in two days!? Amazing. I just love this Erica. It's really the Erica that we saw in her first few episodes. And I love her. She certainly is naughty though.

“Careful, Sloan. Your panty lines are showing.” - I love this. How she can tease him in front of people at work and get away without anyone there knowing. She's so awesome!

You've spoiled me with these stories, I hope I don't have to wait too long for the next Merica story.

[hot_4_hahn]

Well, I don't think you'll have to wait too, too long for more Merica. I'm adoring this pairing a little too much. And now that I've got my first bingo out of the way, I plan to get us a little more meat here and move the story along somewhat.

But, I'm happy to have provided a little Merica fix this weekend. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Erica teasing and toying with Sloan is just the best Erica, I think. She just snatches the upper hand from him so many times and in so many ways.

Thank you so very much! I really am thrilled that you're enjoying these stories.