fic: had a bad day (El/Neal, NC-17)
LOOK, MA! I WROTE HET! Er... Actually, on second thought: LOOK AWAY, MA. LOOK AWAY!
Title: had a bad day
Author: hoosierbitch
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Elizabeth/Neal
Warnings/content: Buttplugs, snowballing, nipple torture, CBT, crops, bondage, painplay.
Notes: Written for the painplay (other) square of my
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Title: had a bad day
Author: hoosierbitch
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Elizabeth/Neal
Warnings/content: Buttplugs, snowballing, nipple torture, CBT, crops, bondage, painplay.
Notes: Written for the painplay (other) square of my
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I love (what a fucking lame word) what you've done here. At first, it's Bad!El - but no, it's not. It's Human!El - not a sex!fairy - but a real, honest to god human with really kinky tastes.
And fuck, hell - what can I say...
“You’re welcome,” he says, and usually this would be one of those moments where she’d get angry at him. For being so goddamn perfect, and sweet, and careful. Tonight, though, she just feels…grateful. Honored, even, that he’s let her so far into his life. Humbled that he’s so willing to give them both so much, so easily. Or maybe not so easily, she thinks, thinking of how dark the bruises on his body will be, come morning. How hard he’d fought in his restraints. How hard he’d fought to obey her every whim ( ... )
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Thank you so much, Elr! I'm so thrilled that you liked El in this!
♥ ♥ ♥
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And it was glorious!
I love your characterization of El. In some ways, I've been where she is here -- I remember the weird mix of feelings I felt when I realized that our third at the time loved cleaning and organizing things as much as Daniel does, very much unlike myself -- and I get that need to be reassured that nobody's perfect, right? And I love that she's been having to be nice to people all day and she just needs to... not. That makes perfect sense.
And also, omg, hot. I love how intimate the hurting is, the way she uses her hands and teeth. And the way he seems a little bit genuinely freaked out, but then wants her to keep hurting him as he comes... holy fuck.
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THANKS! I figure it'll be a while before I get as comfortable writing het as I am with slash, but you and Ash and Elr have been writing such HOT women!centric fics, it's really inspired me!
So I'm SO THRILLED that you enjoyed the hurt and the pain and the poly! THANK YOU!
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I like that she's not always happy with neal but that she loves him and they find a way to make it all work.
:) Hot as always and amazing!
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Neal and El? And Dom!El?! And tied-up Neal?!
I love you so much. This is hot and dangerous and beautiful.
I love this. I'm a big sucker for good Doms, but you got the sub part down very well. I know El was hurting him, but if Neal had tapped out at any point, I am rather cetain El would have stopped for him. But Neal doesn't because even though he doesn't like what she's doing, he GIVES her what she needs.
Elizabeth is just taking and using him; he wants to make her happy. That's what subs do. :-)
But wow. This was amazing. I don't know why you don't write het more often because this is seriously hot. Did I mention it's hot???
I loved all of it (as usual) but my favorite part is the whole section where she takes care of him, and then the last part of the fic, where El feels so honored to be able to do this.
Brava! Thank you so much for writing this. :-D
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I'm so glad that the way Neal was a sub in this fic worked so well for you - I did a lot of reading on painplay for this fic (the kink-wiki is my new BFF), and it was fun to play with the idea that really, it can be enough just to get off on the fact that your partner's getting off.
THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE AWESOME FEEDBACK! I hope there will be more het in my future! :D
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And yet you managed to make it sweet and lovey at the end... :)
*sigh*
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THANKS, BB! I'm so glad the porn/schmoop worked well for you. :D :D :D
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